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. . . dead hearts cannot see . . . |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
he walked in her life toying with love and her heart it is but a game ~*~ another score made never minded her feelings he’s just passing time ~*~ he just walked away never looking behind him his heart cannot see ~*~ his heart does not feel not connected to his mind the dead cannot see Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
A wonderful collection of Senryu's.? There seems to be alot of dead souls walking around, and yes they cannot see. A great write Inteloper! I enjoyed. Maree  |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Interloper - A lovely, dark piece. Hauntingly familiar as if I have witnessed this scene. Perhaps I have. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
I knew a dead hearted man once...he is looking for someone to grow old with about now and there aren't anymore standing in line. You are so very exquisitly right! Bravo! Sincerely, Regina |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Interloper, I knew a very dark cold man once who didn't care about my feelings..... *S*.....once!! Good write. ~Nancy~
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* this is the kind of man I am very familiar with. But now I am starting to learn not all men are like this. You have put it perfectly. Thank you. Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
So this is what you've been writing in this time of absence... well done! |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
Too many people like that, thanks God for people that know love and poetry. thanks |
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The Lady of Shallot Senior Member
since 2001-10-03
Posts 818USA |
yes, well, yes, this does happen. It can change a person's life completely. Very sad and very true, unfortunately....some heal and remember the feelings and pray they were real and all a person ever really knows is if there's were....or not.... -befriend yourself and you will never be alone- Anna [This message has been edited by The Lady of Shallot (edited 10-18-2001).] |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Thanks to all of you for your comments and stopping by to read. For those of you that know my work, this is a departure from the norm. It was just on my heart after reading many works here with virtually the same subject. Why is it that we, men and women, cannot or will not see or care that we are shattering someone's hopes, dreams, desires, wishes, and love when we pretend at caring? Where has honesty and integrity gone? Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. [This message has been edited by Interloper (edited 10-19-2001).] |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Enjoyed this, Interloper... *smiles* ~Tier |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
This is sadly true for many whose hearts certainly did not deserve the pain. If only all were treated as they desire to be. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Interloper--I guess the dark in life is there to help us see the light. Interesting and thoughtful poem. |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Very touching. These are the kind of men I have known. Sometimes, I wander, if they aren't all like this. Thank you for sharing this. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Interloper, An excellent write, enjoyed. |
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Domzi Member
since 2001-09-08
Posts 288New York (BK) |
I enjoyed reading this excellent poem. It sounded all too real. As my borough has always stated- Do or Die. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Interloper I have found that most of the women I have known like this were very up front about it...they did not pretend to be something they were not...and yet I ignored the obvious thinking things would change...and in fact they change very slowly...in most cases it takes years and years...all of us need to ask ourselves the question...are we willing to give years of our lives hoping someone will be what they are not when in fact they are exactly who they are...James |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Thank you for the wonderful comments James - anyone who marries another believing they can change that person is a fool. Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Sweetie ya know your terrific write just inspired me with a verse I'll put up here later2nite... Hugs2uAlwaysPoetFriend, cuz I really enjoy reading your poetry... *~coco~* |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Very well expressed!~ Take care, Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sad sigh) Such sadness and grief fills this short poems! My heart goes out to them all and I hope they can find a beacon of light through time! (big hugggsssssss) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
what he couldn't see what he didn't understand she knew this game well ~*~ he was not the first to play these games with her heart she has played before ~*~ her heart, an old pro many scars remain to show she will be just fine ~*~ |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You inspire very well...look here /pip/Forum51/HTML/001775.html |
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2dalimit Member Elite
since 2000-02-08
Posts 2228Mississippi coast |
Excellent! Powerful piece of poetry. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Again, thank you all. SEA ~ GR8 piece, and I know you are right! Thanx, gal Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. [This message has been edited by Interloper (edited 10-22-2001).] |
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BrightStar Member
since 2001-04-08
Posts 219 |
Bumpers Admiring you at Passions. |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
what the eyes can not see the heart feels.... that was a title to one of my poems long ago...be well thanks for sharing... Greeneyes~ I keep my ideals, because in spite of everything, I still believe that people are really good at heart. Anne Frank 09*12*01 [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (edited 10-23-2001).] |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I missed reading this one the day it was posted. It is unconscionable to toy like this with another's heart and soul, and anyone who could do this better stay away from my heart. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Oh, my I am glad I wandered back a bit to find this. I wonder how people can not even see when they crush anothers heart and soul. And not care, either. You did these very well, with the exact feeling involved, on my part anyway. Sandra |
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