Open Poetry #16 |
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September come November |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart ![]() |
September come November thus, self forbidding mizzle to befriend me in those years paled hoary there appears an unoccupied interim of time where coming aware splinters of having lost my way recall of déjà vu eviscerates, something potent gnaws, walls between then and now sheer only to opaque, senility will most likely clarify what motions were made, for snapped memories color decades, but eye’s grit decrees absence two fingering dimensional images does not make them warm for a second time I would be a girl again, if doing so meant mother’s lap should hold shed sentiments or father’s shirt would gather denimed memories and clouded outbursts perhaps once this decade is fulfilled, I shall see Octobers again warming to those days between September come November when pain will ease perhaps once this decade is fulfilled, perhaps, once perhaps |
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Mistletoe Angel![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
![]() (big hugggssssss) Oh, sweet Karilea, I know just how you feel; I am turning 18 in eleven days, and every September I always feel depressed when looking back in my boyhood sorrows, and how I'd love to sit in my parents laps again and talk the hours away! (big hugggssssss) My heart is always with you, dearest friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet sunshine, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
This is beautiful, sunshine... ![]() |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very much so! Well done, Karilea! |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
*sigh*...Well HECK Karilea, you keep getting better and better...and I still dream of growing up and writing ...just...like...you! Never tire of reading you work, my friend. jwesley |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
An emotion packed poem that had me nodding my head in understanding. I know these feelings well and you have put them to verse in such a way that I can't help but see you too feel these things and hope. Very well done. Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Ah, I am young still (not that young I suppose..a month until official adulthood), but I can relate to this. You've evoked a poignant emotion, I love your imagery, it is excellent! I truly enjoyed the read. ![]() *Krista Knutson* |
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Mysteria![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Oh but I love your memories, even the painful ones, for they are "family" and I loved these lines Sunshine: I would be a girl again, if doing so meant mother’s lap should hold shed sentiments or father’s shirt would gather denimed memories and clouded outbursts Beautiful! ~I always have time to listen to someone talking from their heart~ |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
"perhaps once this decade is fulfilled, I shall see Octobers again warming to those days between September come November when pain will ease" Karilea--you know I know...hugs! |
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Interloper![]() ![]()
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Perhaps surely. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Sunshine- Much emotion in this one. It reached in and touched my heart. Big hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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