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Christopher

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-02

Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration

0 posted 2001-10-16 11:57 PM

Blame Nicole.

C
Road Trip… on Random
©2001 C.G. Ward

rivulets of age
bend
to crease the corners off my smile
while countless tear-hardened miles
        bridge yet another fork
of indecision.

but oh how the nights drive wild!
inclination form inspiration,
  virtual ink bleeding out tomorrow
        in my mind,
paving this highway of fame
   a metaphor a minute.

        still,
i'd trade all these scars
for a simple world of whole…
or the whole of a simple world.
    -       take your pick.

instead -
i flip a one-eighty...
degrees of separation:
pacingracingchasing…
years on the tires
to find i only ride the sunset dark.
dammit,
why does the day dawn brightest
for those who cannot see?

please,
   tell me,
can i close my eyes on yesterday,
clatter the chatter drowning out the hope?
can i find a path to wander,
ride the ‘love-you’ wonder
-of surety at the least-
skidding past the edges, straight
into happily ever after?

...

so, it eludes me,
this dream.
the concept, the realization -
far beyond my ken.
guess then – sigh –
guess i’ll hit 'random,'
and wait for track sixty-five.
it’s a song about forever,
if i remember right.

Rosebud1229
Senior Member

since 2000-04-05

Posts 1813
North Carolina

1 posted 2001-10-17 12:56 PM

Let me be the first to say this is a great poem. Life does have a few curves and bumps,
but somehow you have to know which lane you are better in. You know how they can be on the interstate. It's that way in life,
Yes sometimes the sun does glare in your eyes, but sometimes something amazing happens like an awesome sunset. Well enough rambling really enjoyed.

PoetryLuvR
Junior Member

since 2001-07-27

Posts 16
Ca, USA

2 posted 2001-10-17 02:18 AM

I really enjoyed this poem, not only because its a great piece of art, but because you learn from it as well as experience the emotions behind it. Loved it, thank you for sharing it

Elizabeth Cor
Senior Member

since 2000-10-13

Posts 879
Over the river and through the woods

3 posted 2001-10-17 03:28 PM

Ahh.. there it is... waited for this (of course).

here:

        still,
i'd trade all these scars
for a simple world of whole…
or the whole of a simple world.
    -       take your pick.

and here:

years on the tires
to find i only ride the sunset dark.
dammit,
why does the day dawn brightest
for those who cannot see?
---
please,
   tell me,
can i close my eyes on yesterday,
clatter the chatter drowning out the hope?
can i find a path to wander,
ride the ‘love-you’ wonder
-of surety at the least-
skidding past the edges, straight
into happily ever after?

but mostly HERE:

so, it eludes me,
this dream.
the concept, the realization -
far beyond my ken.
guess then – sigh –
guess i’ll hit 'random,'
and wait for track sixty-five.
it’s a song about forever,
if i remember right.

not shrapnel; maybe slingshots that sink when they hit...

you're writing simpler... strange... ~smirksmile~ but always growing... ~shaking head~ amazes me; how many revelations and self-exploits run through that head of yours in a day? I do wonder...

Your mind is never where it seems to be, rock; and more than you admit, I think, it is often looking backwards. Chin up, face forward, cope

... that's what you've told me.

[This message has been edited by Elizabeth Cor (edited 10-17-2001).]

Nicole
Senior Member

since 1999-06-23

Posts 1835
Florida

4 posted 2001-10-18 12:08 PM

Blame Nicole??

heh

So, just how many song files does that thing hold?

Christopher

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-02

Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration

5 posted 2001-10-18 01:56 PM

rosebud & poetryluvr - thank you for you kind, sweet, sincere replies - i find it ironic that a poem which i considered fluffy & 'stupid' received accolades, while this one, which i felt merited, thoughtful, and to the point passes by virtually unnoticed... makes one wonder...

just a poem ocean princess, not my life...

nic - Kenwood Deck, 40W/Channel, Am/Fm, CD & Mp3 player - figure the average burnable cd media is 650M and the average mp3 file is 4M, that means I can get around 160 songs on one disc... makes for a nice road-trip on random, eh?

C