Just wrote this little something

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Open Poetry #16

Just wrote this little something

PoetryLuvR
Junior Member

since 2001-07-27

Posts 16
Ca, USA

0 posted 2001-10-16 01:07 AM

this is just a little something i wrote right now, don't judge to harsh hehe
might turn it into something real rather than just what it is...not sure yet, tell me what ya think!

my heart needs a break from this runaway train
i'll jump and hit the ground running
then follow the moon
don't miss me too much
i've broken enough hearts for today
save it for tomorrow, I'll let you break first.

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

1 posted 2001-10-16 01:12 AM

This is a fun one, and I think you can leave it as it stands...or runs. You heartbreaker, you!

RosePetal

Member Elite

since 2001-08-26

Posts 2985
South Florida

2 posted 2001-10-16 01:17 AM

Short and sweet..I like it like this instead of very long because once you go on and on and on you tend to lose the reader, : )
Good Job!

[This message has been edited by RosePetal (edited 10-16-2001).]

Domzi
Member

since 2001-09-08

Posts 288
New York (BK)

3 posted 2001-10-16 06:47 AM

         This poem was nice.
         You
            Kept
            It
            Short &
            Sweet!

As my borough has always stated- Do or Die.

Startime
Member Ascendant

since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

4 posted 2001-10-16 09:37 AM

*giggling* it was easy to run through this poem. I like it as is. *grin* now be careful how many hearts you break one could be your own. Take care.

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

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