....The Opening.... - Part 2

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Lady In White

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0 posted 2001-10-12 10:56 AM

                              The Opening – Part 2

                              Perhaps it was but a moment, or
                              longer, time runs swift covering movements
                              when a heart is rendered, bleeding,
                              but soon tears crusted, rivulets dried
                              on her pink cheeks, her hands fumbled
                              over the package, still in her lap.
                              The velvet gown now darker with droplets
                              of life’s source, she did not think of
                              this, but only of him, as an audible
                              sound escaped her lips, his memory fresh
                              as his face crossed her mind.

                              “Ah, love, now, now when?”

                              She picked up the bone knife, carefully
                              slit open the missive, taking mind not
                              to break the seal of wax,
                              the last time she would see it ~
                              his symbol, his emblem,
                              his truth, his
                              sign.

                              Slowly, the tears began again with the first line….

[This message has been edited by Lady In White (edited 10-12-2001).]

Janet Marie
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1 posted 2001-10-12 11:23 AM

ahhh Lady...
you tease us while you please us so.....
holding my breath for more

When your own emptiness is all that's getting through
There comes a point when you're not sure why you're still talking
I passed that point long ago

SEA

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with you

2 posted 2001-10-12 12:22 PM

I held my breath reading this, and will till I read the next.........

Martie

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3 posted 2001-10-12 06:11 PM

Lady--More please!!!!

Auguste

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4 posted 2001-10-13 03:42 AM

Bump

Michael Auguste~
There is more depth to the heart than the mind can comprehend and it only has boundaries when we choose to fence it in.

Midnitesun

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5 posted 2001-10-13 03:55 AM

OK, so things that go bump in the night might not reveal what you think. I'm waiting here for the sequel. Lady, you have created a character we all want to know more about, where her emotions go with this letter we can surmise. But I can only guess at the whole story. You are spinning a wonderful web for us.

Mysteria

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6 posted 2001-10-14 01:09 AM

said WHAT, WHAT, WHAT.....lol, hurry, hurry, no teasing!

Logan
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7 posted 2001-10-14 02:47 AM

Geez, Lady, you are beginning to have all of Passions on the edge of their seats..very nicely done..very gentle smile

Sudhir Iyer
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8 posted 2001-10-15 12:04 PM

Fantastic....

Regards,
Sudhir
P.S. rushing off for Part III...

Nan

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9 posted 2001-10-15 12:13 PM

Indeed...

Interloper

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Deep in the heart

10 posted 2001-10-15 06:44 PM

Okay, I'm hooked ... what did the first line say?

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

LngJhnAg
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Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion

11 posted 2001-10-16 01:11 PM

Devilishly clever, indeed - I like the way you built this story - the style is consistently good

suthern

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12 posted 2001-10-16 03:13 PM

You've hooked another fish. *G* Swimming off to find the rest....

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

13 posted 2001-10-16 03:24 PM

What did it say? On to the next......

Startime
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14 posted 2001-10-16 03:26 PM

*oh my gosh* I have tears in my eyes...on to the next one.

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

rwood
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15 posted 2001-10-18 06:52 PM

Hanging on the edge here....hopping to the next..feels like cheating but I can't stand it.

Sincerely,
Regina

vlraynes
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Somewhere... out there...

16 posted 2001-10-23 04:21 AM

Lady In White-
   Oh yes...love this.
   Hugs,
   ~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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