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serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

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0 posted 2001-10-11 01:43 AM

Is it okay to weep, tonight?
Is it okay to choose a fall?
Is it okay to pout my lips
in gloss beneath a mirrored ball...

dazzles of reflections play
lights before me show the way
Hither come and thither gone
heart-in-pulse to beat of song...

So much smoke
and too much wine
So many pose as one--
entwined...
(say that you are ever mine)
before I wish myself away.

Glitter shadow under eyes
in mockery of tears I've cried...
and should you ask, I'll say I lied.
I'll swear to you I never died.
I'll swear
I never gave a damn,
or prayed my hand become your hand...

I need you.
I am so afraid.
I need to hear
the things unsaid...
there's seed of rage
inside of me--
that kicks the wall
of things unseen.

[This message has been edited by serenity (edited 10-11-2001).]

CocoBaci
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since 2000-05-06

Posts 3043

1 posted 2001-10-11 01:58 AM

Glitter shadow under eyes
in mockery of tears I've cried...
and should you ask, I'll say I lied.
I'll swear to you I never died.
I'll swear
I never gave a damn,
or prayed my hand become your hand...

hi Serenity, your poem touches my heart sweetie and I thank you for yet another incredible read that you've provided me...
*~coco~*

LoveLetters
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since 2001-10-09

Posts 35
State of Hope

2 posted 2001-10-11 02:11 AM

ROTFL! I forgot I was replying and composed a whole poem in the reply. My blunder. I do love this, Serenity. You have been in tune with my own mood for sure?

[This message has been edited by LoveLetters (edited 10-11-2001).]

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

3 posted 2001-10-11 03:19 AM

A very heartfelt poem Serenity.

~I always have time to listen to someone talking from their heart~

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

4 posted 2001-10-11 05:40 AM

Is it okay to weep, tonight?
Is it okay to choose a fall?
Is it okay to pout my lips

Of course it is hon.
This is so heartfelt m'dear... HUGS YOU

Maree

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

5 posted 2001-10-11 06:32 AM

I need you.
I am so afraid.
I need to hear
the things unsaid...
words on my mind lately, too... hugs

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

SmittenKitten
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since 2001-06-20

Posts 1131
where the sky and horizon meet

6 posted 2001-10-11 10:46 AM

Serenity~ Wow...I felt this one. Sometimes the things unsaid are the most deafening eh? Powerfully expressed...as usual I enjoyed your style of rhyme and the cadence as well

Hugs,
~Krista

Your beautiful words & creativity allow me to connect with the same in myself.
Thank you for having the courage to share yourself so that I can too

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

7 posted 2001-10-11 11:07 AM

Wheeeeewwww....a lot of love and feelings
within this poem....Nice expression...

Sven

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since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

8 posted 2001-10-11 07:59 PM

in the things unheard
are the messages from life
messages that must be heard
so that we can grow
so that we can feel
so that we can learn
open your ears. . .

here's hoping that you know to listen. . .

-------------------------------------------------------

To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

The Lady of Shallot
Senior Member

since 2001-10-03

Posts 818
USA

9 posted 2001-10-11 08:00 PM

with the right person, it's simply "ok" to be yourself and that's a wonderful feeling.

-befriend yourself and you will never be alone-

Tracey
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since 2001-08-29

Posts 2808
where insanity meets breeding

10 posted 2001-10-11 10:27 PM

Oh Serentity, this is indeed a wonderful piece of writing. I can just picture this scene and feel the emotions in it.

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

rwood
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since 2000-02-29

Posts 3793
Tennessee

11 posted 2001-10-12 07:06 AM

Serenity...you are very okay with me...as long as you don't kick me. But you definately have a beautiful way of making one feel like even that would be okay. I really admire your depth and flame in your poetry.

Sincerely,
Regina

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

12 posted 2001-10-12 10:15 AM

I wanted to pick out a line or two that I really liked...but couldn't..I like the whole darn poem!!!

...and YOU too of course

Lady In White

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since 2001-02-12

Posts 2799
USA

13 posted 2001-10-12 10:30 AM

All things left unsaid usually leave a disquieted heart...

but you say things so well...

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

14 posted 2001-10-12 10:19 PM

NOW....this one was intensely personal...don't even enjoy rereading it...(paging Dr. Freud?) But I thank you all, tho I am always a bit disturbed to find so many relate to my inner demons...love to you all...and? THANK YOU.

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