Open Poetry #16 |
Sandcastles and Secrets |
Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
~* Sandcastles and Secrets *~~I always have time to listen to someone talking from their heart~ |
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The Lady of Shallot Senior Member
since 2001-10-03
Posts 818USA |
You stole my heart with this one. Any poem about the shore and sandcastles is a keeper! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Mysteria, You have done it once again. Just when I thought I didn't have any tears left...This is so beautiful...I cannot find the words. I have read it five times now..the history penned here could have been written by me, or probably many of us out here. But, only you Mysteria could tell it in this this gentle, tender, loving way. ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~ |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
An unexpected twist at the end Wonderful poem! in every way You are amazing Liz |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
She had loved him she knew that now, and they made passionate love. Now as she looked at her son, Her low tide mirrored no black shadow On the sands of this shore. ================================ This is bittersweet beauty you have woven for us with your golden pen Sharon... wonderful imagery and presentation and touching writing. well done poetess M We're all feeding our lonely ... like it might go away, |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Lady of Shallot ~ Yes, and sandcastles intrigue me as well, and I am glad you enjoyed this. Enchantress ~ I suppose this speaks to a large amount of young women of the 60's and things were sure different then. Yes, it does speak to a large number I assume, and I thank you for your kind words and reading it. Elizabeth ~ Sometimes an unexpected twist is a good thing, and other times not - I guess this was actually a good one thanks for reading. Janet Marie ~ I thought you were busy and here you are sneaking in here reading, well I appreciate you stopping in and your lovely words as usual hon. ~I always have time to listen to someone talking from their heart~ |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
This is why I always look forward to reading your poetry! This moved me so much, what a sad, yet, beautiful story...and the picture and music are a perfect addition! Take care, Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
This is lovely - What's better than a child and sharing sandcastle... I'm smiling.. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Melissa ~ You flatter me, as really I am no poetry writer, that is for sure. But I love to write what is in my mind and I am so very happy some of you enjoy it. Nan ~ You just wait, I will have you a Pacific vs Atlantic Sandcastle contest and we shall see who wins - hmm? Think you can do it? Opps, thanks for reading my ditty. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah, how what we perceive as life's mistakes... turn into treasures... |
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Martha Cowan Member
since 2001-03-08
Posts 240Groves, Texas |
Well...you REALLY did it to me with this one! Soft and flowing emotions that found their way right into the center of my heart. (...and, yes....I AM wiping a tear, although I KNOW you would never imagine that coming from me ~*~winks~*~) This was so very beautiful, Sharon, and it certainly spoke to my heart. Hugs and much love to you, always ~*~dawn~*~ |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Bittersweet and tender write Sharon. Your imagery is perfect in this. Hugs. On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet |
Sharon~ What a tender and heart-felt expression...no wonder some tears are being shed! Your images flow together and create this heart-wrenching tale...I could just picture a woman standing at the shore of the sea and pouring her heart out into the waves. You've touched me again sweet poetess. Hugs, ~Krista Your beautiful words & creativity allow me to connect with the same in myself. |
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Apachecat906 Member
since 2001-09-04
Posts 217Michigan, USA |
Beautiful Poetry ! I Enjoy Works About Loves For you today I shall build a small castle made of words in tribute of how your poem has touched me Thank you for this write |
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Flutterwings Member
since 2001-07-10
Posts 288Maine |
This elergy is so profound and heart-breaking... A deep longing within these words is so vivid and moving. I could feel the pain, like a vise sqeezing the chamber of a heart in sorrow. But, with a love so great and powerful like the waves that crash the shores of your yearning. Sharon, this has to go to print.... this has to be one of the most tearful read you've ever written. Publish it now!!! Bravo! Love and peace Maggie, with a tear on her cheek. and a lump in her throat. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Sunshine ~ Now that should be on a plaque! Martha and Maggie ~ My two over zealous romantic writing friends, your words are only outdone by your hearts you know that? Where do you come up with these comments, and new words all the time that relate to human emotions? I think you two should collaborate and write a book! Gentle Spirit ~ Thank you very much for enjoying it. Smitten Kitten ~ I am glad you stopped in and enjoyed this one, as I saw the picture and had to write about it. Apachecat 906 - That was simply beautifully done, and thank you for that, I printed it out and kept it in my comments box, thank you again ~I always have time to listen to someone talking from their heart~ |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sharon---what a wonderful and tender story of love..beautifully done! |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
This story strikes so many chords in us all, Sharon. So very well done. (BTW - Thanks for not including any mention of kitties, as I am in a very fine kitty-kicking mood today.) |
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Apachecat906 Member
since 2001-09-04
Posts 217Michigan, USA |
Okay I have to ask, what is it with LongJohn and Kitties? And, youre welcome mysteria. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Martie ~ Thank you LongJohn ~ Know what I am going to do, I am going to buy one psycho cat on my way to Nan's and get it wrapped up just for you! Oh brother, did anyone ever report you to the SPCA or whatever it is down there where they protect animals? LOL Apachecat906 - Better ask him! Opps, and with a name with cat in it, I think he better have a darn good answer! |
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AJ MacNeil Junior Member
since 2001-05-02
Posts 40 |
What gracious beauty flows within this lovely poem Sharon ... the road from your heart to your pen is paved with such compassion and understanding ! Love as always, Andy XO |
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A Whisper's Caress Senior Member
since 2000-11-03
Posts 791on the horizon of a fairytale |
this is an incredible write..... Poetic verse nestled in the warmth of my heart, reveals the sweet yearnings of my soul.... |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Andy - thanks hon! A Whisper's Caress - Thank you, this is one I actually am a little glad I did. |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
So sad but beautiful, Mysteria. I love the way you present your poems. Dee I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* bittersweet memories written from your heart and shared with us so tenderly. Yes, tears filled my eyes too as I read your words. Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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