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Safely At Bay
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Safely At Bay |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
 I walk along the ocean blue My thoughts slip quietly to you Standing on the beach ahead Seeking out the path you tread You gaze out at the gentle waves Whose lifeblood still quietly saves Washing the stains of yesteryear Making memories even more dear What exactly was it that went wrong Silencing your heart’s sweet song Leaving me here sorrowful and sad The victim of a passing fad I wish I knew the answer now Instead my eyes instinctively bow Ashamed of all that’s been said Leaving our love here for dead No one can predict our fate For each of us has unique traits That allow us to be who we are Taking us so very far I know I played a part In the locking of your heart Perhaps I deserve my lot Then again maybe not You alone held the key To all that our life could be Choosing to go your own way Kept my love safely at bay artwork: Pacific Sanctuary by: Steve Hanks All writing comes by the grace of God. -Ralph Waldo Emerson [This message has been edited by Lone Wolf (edited 07-11-2001).] |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
For each of us has unique traits That allow us to be who we are Ahhh, LW, who you are is very wonderful indeed, with unique traits of great talent, and very loved by many here..very gentle smile |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
a gentle, sad piece and the artwork is a wonderful accompaniment |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LoneWolf~ This is tenderly sad~ and lovely as well~ I like the graphic ... depicts the mood that your words convey. *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Every word of this touched my heart! |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
 Wolfie This tugs at my heart ya know that huh... Great writing sweetie and I missed ya... Hugs2UalwaysPoetFriend *~coco~* |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
God, I love this~!!!!!!!!!!! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
nicely written... a sad story..but an enjoyable read... |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
This speaks softly and yet loudly, and I enjoyed every bit of it. I've said it before. Your work is growing it seems. |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
I don't know which came first the picture or your words..... but they compliment each other very nicely. I could really feel the emotion from the one walking alone on the beach. I also liked how you used the words, safely at bay. Your post was beautifully displayed and I enjoyed the mood it brought very much. -Bob |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Logan: Thank you much, my friend. VAS: I thought it fit the words well. Marge: I see I have done my job then. Thank you! JLR: From my heart to yours. Coco: Thank you, I missed you too. Kathleen: Aw!!  Cpat Hair: Sometimes, life is like that. Thanks. Temptress: There is much power to be found in the written word I think. Glad you enjoyed it. Thanks! Bob: They go hand in hand it seems. I have taken that walk many times and this is the feeling I always get. I appreciate you sharing your thoughts here, my friend. All writing comes |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
The ocean brings out so many memories for me, also. I especially liked this part "You gaze out at the gentle waves Whose lifeblood still quietly saves Washing the stains of yesteryear Making memories even more dear What exactly was it that went wrong Silencing your heart’s sweet song Leaving me here sorrowful and sad The victim of a passing fad" Be happy Sandra |
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cpalmer Senior Member
since 2001-06-26
Posts 977Phoenix, Az |
Lone Wolf.. This was sad but beautifully written...I love the picture too....hugs Cindi God is our inspiration; Words of the heart can be music to our ears |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
This was extremely well written, enjoyed (and love Stephen Hanks which added the right touch Lone Wolf, nice presentation. ~If you have a choice to sit down or dance, I hope that you dance~ |
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pure_innocence Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 80Colorado, US |
Lovely poem, amazng rhyming structure. Well done, I enjoyed it greatly. Thanks for sharing and I hope to read more of you work! |
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shadow974 Senior Member
since 2001-06-21
Posts 636Michigan |
Very well written and the graphic fits perfectly. Do not fear going forward slowly, |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Solemn, with much emotion and wisdom. The lines which resonated with me were: ------------------------------------ My thoughts slip quietly to you You alone held the key To all that our life could be Choosing to go your own way Kept my love safely at bay ------------------------------------- Somber, but powerful and a good read. -MVS "If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn." |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
LoneWolf- This is beautifully done, and with a touch of sadness...lovely.. You've penned these feelings perfectly.. hugs, ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (edited 07-14-2001).] |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
Very beautifully said. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Sandra: There is much comfort to be found within the waves and the water. Thank you! Cindi: Life can be that way at times, but in the end it usually turns out for the best. Hugs back to you! Mysteria: Thank you very much! Stephen Hanks is one of my favorites. His work is stunning. pure_innocence: You are welcome for sharing. Thank you for stopping by to read and for your kind words. They are much appreciated. Welcome to Passions! shadow974: Thank you! Mark: Life has made me very wise indeed. Thanks! Vicky: The sadness wasn't intentional, it just kind of worked out that way. Thank you and welcome back! walker: All writing comes |
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