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Trillium 
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA 
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Sea-Surge In the harbor I perceive A sailing ship prepare to leave. As she turns to face the sea, Her figurehead looks out at me. Lovely lady, made of wood, Looks so real I almost could Think that I can hear her sigh, Musing on the miles gone by. Pretty face with hair a-curl. Does she represent a girl Someone loved and hoped to keep Close beside him on the deep? She courts the wind; fears the reef, Afraid her ship will come to grief. Riding where the wild waves cream. Is she just a sailor's dream? As I watch the tack she'll take, Gray mists swirling, hide her wake. She is out of sight now, so, Reluctantly, I turn to go, But I hear the buoy toll. Feel a sea-surge in my soul! Betty Lou Hebert [This message has been edited by Trillium (edited 07-24-2001).] |
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shadow974 Senior Member
since 2001-06-21
Posts 636Michigan |
Very nicely written I have always wondered what the woman was called. Is she a sailors dream? Does she move about the ship and protect her men? Sure she does!!! Do not fear going forward slowly, Fear only standing still. [This message has been edited by shadow974 (edited 07-24-2001).] |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
really vivid well done especially enjoyed the last line I really think one could feel the sea-surge after such an experience |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"Feel a sea-surge in my soul!" love that  |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
BettyLou~ You write so vividly ... This is just lovely, lovely, lovely~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
yes.. this is nice.. very very nice... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Trillium, You write and rhyme well, I enjoyed this read. |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
shadow974: I guess the figurehead must have been a composite of many sailor's dreams, as they came in so many styles. Blonde, brunette and redheads! Thanks for commenting. Betty Lou Hebert |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
VAS: Thanks. It does move one to watch a sailing ship leave harbor and see the figurehead staring out to sea. Or maybe it's just something that affects me! Betty Lou Hebert |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Sea: thanks for your nice comments. Marge: I'm glad you liked this one and thanks for your compliment. Betty Lou Hebert |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Cpat Hair and Seymour: Thank you both for taking time to read this and I appreciate your comments. Betty Lou Hebert |
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