Open Poetry #15 |
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The Path to No Conditions (through Cinquain) |
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Snow![]()
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain ![]() |
The Path to No Conditions through Cinquain holding crumbled crimson watching~ fall through the cracks pieces of my heart, fingers open falling sand ~ bed of pain needles probe open soul amusement park ride ~ for a fee tears paid learning watching new steps lessons taught ~ still I seek offer my soft place ~ conditions... none "Trace my body with your words |
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wandering glider Senior Member
since 2001-04-04
Posts 501aloft |
Interesting use of the form. I'll have to try this, looks like fun. \\ |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
this seems like a painful journey, sad |
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Snow![]()
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
wandering glider, I hope you do try. I love the form, but don't get stuck in it. ;-) thanks for the reply. VAS, a journey should always teach us something. if we learn, then we shouldn't have to repeat it. so i try to look for the lessons instead of the pain. thank you for the reply. Snow "Trace my body with your words |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
You pen these cinquains very skillfully. Nicely done. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
enjoyed ![]() There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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kaile![]() ![]()
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
your cinquains remind me of onions...they both have multiple layers...multiple meanings... thanx for the journey within your words ![]() |
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