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MyEnchanted_Melody Senior Member
since 2001-05-30
Posts 1106across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be. |
~~~  The portrait of her ~~~He sat down….. Mesmerized Frozen at the sight Of the portrait of her The enchanting magic Of seeing A replica of her He traced it As if tracing a dream Breathed in The scent of the painting For she has surely breathed it too He looked Looked And looked Forever it seems A spark of an idea Came to him And he decided to draw his own portrait Of her Draw it with words Words….. alphabets The magical brush of utterances He sat down Putting all words before him Looking at each and every letter Trying to select those Which would Dance perfectly to the rhythm He wants it to be played The rhythm of his own heart As he draws this picture of her A little blush over The petal like cheeks And words subside for a while Expressing the blush of her Under his gaze A little smile And all the words stand Still Beside each other in a raw Expressing that enchanting smile Small Eloquent Yet radiant A twinkle in the eye And the stars of words Rush To try to capture The shining eyes The lashes….. Delicate as they are Could there be such a delicate brush Of words To paint them? He must heed The utterances That fit…. He summoned words Words of few letters but they must be Long when Pronounced by thee And what of the eyes…the lips….. the all beauty of her…. beauty that he knows much more than the artist who agonized over all the details of her he knows that it resides deep deeper than the lines which any brush could paint.... Could he ever find Words to paint all that? The most eloquent And poetical utterances Stood before him Waiting for him to choose The best he looked at them Up and down Searched Listened Wondered Thought he found one Then Another Turned the words up side down For long And they lost consciousness At that awkward position. Seeing that…. He dismissed them all Sighed And ah………. That would do….. For she would see The words lost As they stand Before the altar Of her Oh what a portrait Of agony Of despair For in each line he drew He fell in despair Again And again Of finding the right Words to say To paint The magic of her Along the way…. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Thank you It's only me.......only me |
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wandering glider Senior Member
since 2001-04-04
Posts 501aloft |
"The magical brush of utterances" An enchanting read! Enjoyed it. |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet |
aww...how romantic. I say you picked just the right words!  Beautiful write! ~Krista  "Poetry and Hums aren't things which you get, they're things which get you. |
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MyEnchanted_Melody Senior Member
since 2001-05-30
Posts 1106across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be. |
~wandering glider~ It is such a magical brush...isn't it? Thank you for the nice comment ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ~Krista~ Or perhaps the right words picked me Thank you for the sweet comment *************************** |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
*stunned* the ultimate sacrifice of the artist?? to give all for the perfect portrait of love. . . to find just the perfect things to express the love of his heart, his soul. . . is this what we strive for??? perhaps. . . but, do we really know just what it is to "paint the perfect portrait"? these questions are put forth here. . . the answers?? well, they lie in the heart. . . this is superbly wonderful Enchanted Melody. . . just like a dream. . . ---------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Cascading with cashmere torrents of dilemma and futility... some things are meant to be seen, others heard, while others... experienced. A beautiful write, MEM. -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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MyEnchanted_Melody Senior Member
since 2001-05-30
Posts 1106across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be. |
Dear ~Sven~ We would forever stutter on the verge of words trying to put forth all that we feel…….all that love that our souls …..our hearts could reach (even if it is just in our thoughts) “but, do we really know just what it is to "paint the perfect portrait"?” Do we really know?……… DO we really understand?……… but perfection has never been our realm…….. And yes………I ,too, feel the answers to such questions all lie in the heart……. If we could only look deep …..and manage to perfectly decipher all that it says…….  “just like a dream”………and only a dream it could be….. Thousands thanks dear friend for such an uplifting comment……  ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Dear ~Mark~ “some things are meant to be seen, others heard, while others... experienced.” And some are meant to be felt ……….but we’d struggle forever, it seems, to put them into words…… Would we ever succeed?……. Thank you dearly for the really wonderful comment……..I really loved the way you let it cascade with cashmere torrents…… Thank you *************************************** |
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Flutterwings Member
since 2001-07-10
Posts 288Maine |
Written with a pen dipped in the blood of a mournful heart.  To pen what is in one's heart is a work of art that only the artist knows from where it comes. I stand with much admiration and applaud  a masterpiece. I could feel the longing in every single utterance. Kudos! Love and peace ((~.~)) |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Seeds of needs. Succeeds indeed. A creed agreed. Thanks. "Oh what a tangled web we weave when first we practice to decieve" |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Enchanting poem by an enchanting name. If we could only grasp that which descibes the whole of the one we love. So hard to do. I really enjoyed this. Sincerely, Rwood |
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shadow974 Senior Member
since 2001-06-21
Posts 636Michigan |
WOW!!! That's Beautiful. Do not fear going forward slowly, |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
MyEnchanted_Melody, So very incredible! Sauni @~~~>~~ |
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MyEnchanted_Melody Senior Member
since 2001-05-30
Posts 1106across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be. |
Thank you all for your kindness and wonderful comments.......... I wanted to reply to each one of you but I'm in too much of a hurry to be able to do so..... Thank you.......Thank you soooo much ******************************* [This message has been edited by MyEnchanted_Melody (edited 07-22-2001).] |
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Romeo Junior Member
since 2001-06-13
Posts 43 |
hi there the portrait of her another planet in your vast and magical galaxy welldone my dear ,I'm really proud 2 be one of your-pen , huge fans keep up the good work and I wish u a very pleasent trip here...... bye and take care |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Oh my, I am going to have to be another fan here, your work is so utterly romantic, and speaks of the themes I hold dear. Wonderful poem. Do you have a website? Sandra |
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MyEnchanted_Melody Senior Member
since 2001-05-30
Posts 1106across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be. |
~Dear Romeo~ "Galaxy" Romeo?!....... Well, I wonder what kind of galaxy is that...lol.... Thank you as ever kind friend.....It's me that should be proud to have a friend like you..... Thank you ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Dear ~Sandra~ You do really make my heart warm with your words......so thank you from my .....I'm really glad that we have a similar taste when it comes to poetry..... I had a wonderful time going through your website...It is really wonderful and lovely...I simply loved it.....and I intend to go back again..... I wish I have a website......perhaps I should .......Thank you *********************** |
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Constance Member
since 2001-07-28
Posts 393Ohio |
I see that everyone has already said the things I was thinking as I read your poem. Here's one more though--continue! It made me sigh. Lovely. |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Exquisite. First-class stuff.  Deb |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MyEnchantedMelody~ So delicately portrayed ... a portrait from the heart. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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MyEnchanted_Melody Senior Member
since 2001-05-30
Posts 1106across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be. |
~Constance~ Oh.......thank you..... It makes me sigh as well to see that my poem has been received so well.... Thank you ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ~Deb~ Wow....first class! Thank you dearly for such an encouraging comment.... ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Dearest ~Marge~ Yes...a portrait from the heart..... Thank you for reading it and for your comment..... ************************* [This message has been edited by MyEnchanted_Melody (edited 07-28-2001).] |
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