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Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

0 posted 2001-07-20 09:14 AM

It's raining outside

And sitting here in the gloom
Of a room with too many windows
To hide yourself in

The clock on the wall
Is in competition with the dripping gutters
For most monotonous sound of the day.

At least if it stormed, the wind would accompany
lightning and thunder as they played
A symphony of destruction.

Is it the drip or the tick-tock
Of sweeping seconds that reminds me
Of the years I have spent watching out
Of windows and peering through windshields

Heading nowhere and arriving, only to wait
Searching the surroundings with restless eyes
For the next road…

The next horizon?

Tar strips under wheel at 70 produce the same
Repetitive sound that this day spent sitting
Listening to the leaking gutters
And the clock on the wall,

but the highway
Stretched forever it seems

While this day is only an eternity.

[This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (edited 07-20-2001).]

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

1 posted 2001-07-20 09:19 AM

The clock on the wall
Is in competition with the dripping gutters
For most monotonous sound of the day.
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Dadgumit! You have captured those sounds, all of them, perfectly (well, almost perfectly

)

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

2 posted 2001-07-20 10:04 AM

Thanks Interloper.. I do appreciate the comments... never gonna get them perfectly...
but we can continue to try can't we?
Thanks again for the nice words... they are appreciated

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

3 posted 2001-07-20 10:26 AM

"Heading nowhere and arriving, only to wait
Searching the surroundings with restless eyes
For the next road…"

* all my life........
I absolutely love this
fantastic one for the library!

"Four be the things I'd been better without: Love, curiosity, freckles and doubt."
-- Dorothy Parker, on herself

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

4 posted 2001-07-20 10:29 AM

Thanks SEA.. I am pleased you enjoyed...
rainy days and mondays always get me down....

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

5 posted 2001-07-20 11:04 AM

does a clock tick in a vacuum?

then, can that be proof that your journey has taken you far from nowhere?

ooh, I just had the though, with each tick and each tock, one is closer to hearing his/her last, so it's one fewer than the one before, evermore

so, now, will each rainy day and monday be a bit more precious

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

6 posted 2001-07-20 11:07 AM

Thanks VAS... interesting thoughts..and as sound does not travel in a vacuum..the clock would only tick and tock to itself..which we all know when you start tocking to yourself its time to get out more or get help...
(chuckling)

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

7 posted 2001-07-20 12:34 PM

any rainy day, is a good day for me.....
I miss the rain sooooooo much

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

8 posted 2001-07-20 07:11 PM

Like this a lot. Some days it feels like everything is going nowhere.
Sandra

walker
Member Elite

since 2001-02-11

Posts 2240
Florida

9 posted 2001-07-20 07:15 PM

Love this one, well done!

shadow974
Senior Member

since 2001-06-21

Posts 636
Michigan

10 posted 2001-07-20 07:32 PM

Loved this one, Rain storms produce restlessness, was this a thought from the past.

Do not fear going forward slowly,
Fear only standing still.

MARK V SHELDON
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since 2001-06-21

Posts 3015
In a corporeal internship...

11 posted 2001-07-21 11:37 AM

Powerful thoughts and emotions here. I especially liked:

Is it the drip or the tick-tock
Of sweeping seconds that reminds me
Of the years I have spent watching out
Of windows and peering through windshields

Heading nowhere and arriving, only to wait
Searching the surroundings with restless eyes
For the next road…

The next horizon?

Very strong descriptions and thought-provocations.

-MVS

"When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said."
--Del Casher

Mishtheelf
Member

since 2001-07-10

Posts 68

12 posted 2001-07-21 11:42 AM

Boredom is quite a palpable emotion, very distinct. Only a very bored man would write this *LOL* It's great, captures the emotion well. I almost wanted to sit and stare blankly at the clock on my screen waiting for it to change after I read it. Almost. *L*

Ted

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