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The feast.
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The feast. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland 
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 The opaque rhythms of cutlery summon an end to global famine. Hunger is a cruel God, shrilling for murder. You have served her well, Can not crow denial, for It is your name she cries -after all- this is over you will savour the funeral. Burbling against the belly scraps of a childhood feast sing their merry insult, You will never see these days again only trash cans and happy meal throwaways. All the while the Aromatic covenant threatens to replenish your wanton desire. You walk upon my plate, Mourners, spectators the six o' clock crew and soldiers gather to watch your faith. I turn my back. For I eat alone, saying no to the little bridal hearts, all dressed up up in their serum veils, bathed in gravy. Welcome to the feast, wouldn't you take a table, sit and contemplate How you are going to be eaten. "When I have nothing to say my lips are sealed, Say something once why say it again." Talking Heads "Here I am in prison,here I am with a ball and chain There is whiskey in the jar-o" Traditional irish song. [This message has been edited by brian madden (edited 07-19-2001).] |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
A very interesting piece Brian... nice use of imagery and metaphor throughout... I enjoyed!! |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
well, you've sure taken me on a poetic ride today, this is beyond deep, it's beneath layers and layers of thought and I'm getting ready to eat dinner, Brian! This is exceptional in image and word. "It's easier to kill love than to nurture it" Fred Hardesty |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
I thought I was following you Brian until that last stanza...there, well you tipped me over and poured me out. I'm thinking just maybe my psyche doesn't want to understand that last verse anyway, that it wants to deny what it might mean. Anyway, this was quite a captivating read, I will say that. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I got lost occasionally....but sometimes I need a map to find the bathroom!  At times, the hallmark of a good poem is that the reader KNOWS it is good, even without complete understanding.....and Dali is an excellent touch  |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Cpat, I do try to be interesting. Thanks for your kind words. Kathleen, I hope have not spoiled your appetite. Your words mean alot to me thanks. Virginia, I am just as confused as you are, I guess the poem is about hunger and the different kinds. The ending I was just messing around. It is my sense of humour. THanks for following me through this little rant and for your very kind reply. Ball, the bathroom is first door on the left SHEESH! Even after we put the signs you still can't find it. Well sometimes I aim to confuse LOL, because I am good at that. Hell I don't understand me. Well Thanks for your very kind response. "Here I am in prison,here I am with a ball and chain There is whiskey in the jar-o" Traditional irish song. |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Brian my PoetFriend, this is exceptional writing... Hugs2Usweetie *~coco~* |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Brian, good to see you. This is quite a poem, no one hould have to be in such a position, but many are. What is wrong that this could be? Luv ya Sandra |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Brian! Where you come up with this, and how I missed it, I do not know! I only see one place where a word might be removed [two "up"'s side by side] but the impact is there nevertheless.... and I don't think I want to go that way, but what choice? You surely make one think! |
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