Open Poetry #15 |
Staring Back At Me |
Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
When I look at my reflection what is it that I see? There is nothing but a blank face, it's staring back at me. I feel so little any more I don't know if I care what will be, there is just a blank face that keeps staring back at me. Deep inside of this heart there is no love, it can not be, because when I look in the mirror there is a blank face, it's staring back at me. All of this caring seems to be gone there is nothing that I can see, there is just this face in the mirror emotionless, it stares back at me. There is nothing left to give. Why is it you can not see? Do you see my reflection in the mirror as it just sits there staring ......staring back at me? ~I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~ Garth. |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
This was so sad but beautifully written. Take care....Sue Suetang |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Donna~ Well expressed with a simple, yet, effective rhyme scheme full of sad emotion, I can relate~ Take care, Melissa~ |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
"I feel so little any more I don't know if I care what will be, there is just a blank face that keeps staring back at me." I have felt this way for oh so long. So I threw away that mirror and am now feeling renewed. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
sad... yet well written.. I enjoyed |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Perhaps, try looking at a picture -- a snapshot of you from a different, happier time -- instead. When this triggers positive memories, notice that you can still feel, and with that, realize that a change of input results in a change of output... Although this poem projects solemn despair, the subject is transformable with a little desire and effort... Well expressed, though. -MVS -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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