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Capricorn Emerald
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Capricorn Emerald |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA 
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Capricorn Emerald jewel of winter white scintillant with the seduction of a summer's passion filigreed in golden frame and accented with threads of silvered stars glimmer now ever through my sable night shafts of green renewing a lost heart taking it to itself holding it safe in arms of life Capricorn Emerald jewel of winter white guarding ruby heart in cavern of home place yourself in his soul for so long empty filling with your love ------------------------------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. [This message has been edited by Sven (edited 07-20-2001).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I think I've found yet another jewel for the crown... well done Sven! |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Wow, I love this, what a way with words you have  Indeed, this is a gem Melissa  |
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athena4 Senior Member
since 2000-12-10
Posts 622 |
Sven, This is exquisite. The title really drew me in, and the poem is pure beauty. Absolutely loved this... Love, Elise |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Geesh...Who's gonna catch these, tears?  I love this, and your infatuation with green is our blessing, Beautiful Heart! |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Okies Sven. I'm crit you Remember all our convos about cliches? I have a question for you: can you think of a substitute image for 'shining'? Accented threads is nice... You know what - I have a challenge for you...write a poem using no colour imagery at all...but expressing an emotion.. This piece has some nice touches my friend.  K[This message has been edited by Severn (edited 07-19-2001).] |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
love this jewel Sven....excellent as always. Charisma |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Love this, Sven! Such a beautiful writer. Indeed outstanding! Sauni Sauni :) |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Thank you all my friends for you wonderful replies. . . and K, I made a small change to that line. . . I think that word works a little better. . . and, if you'll look around. . . you'll find my answer to your challenge. . . ---------------------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Another precious jewel of a poem. Sandra |
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