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Seven Bells
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Seven Bells |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Seven Bells Seven bells I heard today Above the lilies lay Seven thoughts of mournful wake That passed my heart in rake. Bells that carry memories shoal Passed sorrow to my soul Played upon my every sense Until it rang intense Rang across the valley’s lie Rang loud in mourners cry Sent me back to former bliss Now lost to the abyss Miss of touch and loves delight Throughout the day and night. Things that go with livings flow Those things of granted sew. Lost into the wind their name When bells and lilies claim. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah Sy....perhaps that is why we try so hard to carve a care into the nitches of dare... perhaps... and yes, if that line suits you, use away... well done, our Sy.... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Thank you sweet Sunshine. *L* |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
very nicely written Seymour... leaves me pondering past occaisions when bells and lillies claim |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Eventually the bell tolls for us all and if we lived the sort of life we should have then their will be others in our wake who think of us in ringing reminders. Enjoyed. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Seven thoughts of mournful wake That passed my heart in rake. Bells that carry memories shoal Passed sorrow to my soul Played upon my every sense Until it rang intense ========================== Sent me back to former bliss Now lost to the abyss Miss of touch and loves delight Throughout the day and night. Things that go with livings flow Those things of granted sew. Lost into the wind their name When bells and lilies claim. ================================ Your talent shines in every line of rhyme divine, and this one touches me in places deep. heart hugs sweet Stinky.  me |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
You know this is good, that has been reinforced by those before me, but I need help; there are two lines I don't understand. Each has a word used differently than I've ever seen and I'd like your help. The line with the word rake at the end and the one with the word sew. I'm feeling like it's not a dictionary thing but an interpretation that I'm lacking. Would you mind helping me? Pretty please. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Cpat Hair, That's what was intended, Thanks. RSWells, Exactly, thank you. JM, Love you too. Winkiewinkie Stinky VAS, If your skin gets raked it usually draws blood, well in this it's a phycological rake that draws sorrow. Sew in this case means things you've done in the past. Thanks for the read and comment. |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
The lonely sound of far off bells echoing the memory of those who have come and gone. That’s where this one took me. I bow to you and yours. Peace! |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Well done, Sy. Sometimes passing is noticed where there are no bells or lillies. I like your version better  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Andrew, It took you to the right place, thank you. Interloper, It was intended to soften, thank you. |
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