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Mishtheelf
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since 2001-07-10

Posts 68

0 posted 2001-07-17 06:38 PM

My tears fall dry, anymore.
So long I've waited...
So long I've hoped...
Wished...
But now, you're gone,
My heart dashed on jagged stone.

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

1 posted 2001-07-17 09:11 PM

MishTheElf~
Such a sad little piece~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2001-07-17 09:50 PM

Dry tears are so very painful...a good write...

Snooganzmeister32
Member

since 2001-07-17

Posts 67
Cali, USA

3 posted 2001-07-17 10:36 PM

*is in awe* Oh, my goodness! That is soo beutiful!!

Mishtheelf
Member

since 2001-07-10

Posts 68

4 posted 2001-07-18 04:19 AM

Marge~

  Thanks for the hug.

Sunshine-  Yes they are.  That's why I let this poem be my tears for a while ^_^

Snoogan-  well... Thanks!

Yu Lan
Senior Member

since 2000-04-13

Posts 1462
New Zealand

5 posted 2001-07-20 03:09 AM

Yes, poetry is good for that. And that is good for poetry..

Hugz4Mish, I expect to see more of yours man!
-Lynne

“One word can be magical. Imagine then, the effect of several words, together..”

Yu Lan
Senior Member

since 2000-04-13

Posts 1462
New Zealand

6 posted 2001-07-20 03:11 AM

Oh yeah, one thing.. why is there an 'anymore' at the end of the first line? I'm not sure what it is trying to add.. what does that make the first line mean?
Other than that, yep, I reckon you've done a fine job with this sad little poem.

“One word can be magical. Imagine then, the effect of several words, together..”

Saunni
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since 2000-07-11

Posts 1777
West Virginia

7 posted 2001-07-20 03:15 AM

Aww, so sad! Take care.

Sauni

Sauni :)
Have you ever known the color grey when the nighttime finds you weak
I have, I've walked that road each time; that's where my angel sleeps

vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

8 posted 2001-07-23 01:10 PM

Mishtheelf-
   Ouch!  Such sadness in this write.
   You've conveyed it well.

   hugs,
   ~vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes

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