Open Poetry #15 |
Wheels |
thecraig Member
since 2001-03-11
Posts 223 |
Wheels & circles , places & dreams promises rotating eternally between, truth & honest guesses breaching the gaps, lies & deceit around to attack; There's a Galaxy lady that gallops her ride unseen when she crosses the great divide; Pathways & patterns she leaves with mist a sure tell tale sign to those keen to persist; Pouncing with passion on the knowledge she fashions, enthralled beyond rapture with wisdom they capture using simple methods learning each way finding locations that feel right to stay; Others shall continue to try matching her pace confronted with beauty continuing her race; Then they find to , she is hard work to catch. Stopped on her trail they find their own patch. The Galaxy Lady she rides day & night, she's swift two swift to slow open to sight -------------- ------------------ ------------------------------ ------------------ |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Nice images in this however you start off with this piece reading really well. Then the flow of the piece goes a little whack and made it really distracting to read. I think maybe if you revise it with some meter, it'd be a total killer piece. Great work. Thanks for the read. ~AF~ "Kelly's my Hero!" "No, Kelly's your heroine." "Kelly has heroin??" "What?" |
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