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The Fall
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The Fall |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
I once fell from grace Out of your loving embrace Landing upon the jagged rock When my heart suddenly locked No one knew exactly why I spent hours where I’d cry They knew not of the scars From the cruel prison bars They didn’t know of me Desiring at last to be free Take me away from myself Destroy my wooden shelf I sat on it for years Because of all my fears Afraid to venture out Filled with much self doubt You planted the seed inside Then you made me hide Away from the warm sun With an emotional gun I longed to see the moon Outside my little cocoon Wishing with all my heart That I wouldn’t fall apart I had to try and save The real me from the cave Where I had holed up My soul afraid to sup One day I let go You didn’t even know Too wrapped up life Ignoring ongoing strife I couldn’t try any more To open your heart’s door So I finally gave in Letting defeat win All writing comes |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
So I finally gave in Letting defeat win No, LW, very gentle smile..you just needed to rest on the pathway for awhile..Your strength will not accept defeat, only a crossroad on the path that you will keep. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
WE CAN'T GIVE UP!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! "It's easier to kill love than to nurture it" Fred Hardesty |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
LoneWolf This is a beautiful piece... I can relate all to well....I hope it's just a poem and not life right now but there is too much emotion here so ((((((hugs to you))))) Thank You |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
This was so very well written and you portrayed such hauntingly sad images with your words. Take care.....Sue Suetang |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Nicely expressed emotions, LW...I enjoyed this read...great write... sp  it was love that first drew me, |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LoneWolf~ You have traveled so far beyond any wall that may have tried to contain your spirit~ You soar in victory~ Very moving piece~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
nicely written... but agree with Logan |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
LoneWolf- This is such a beautiful and emotional write. You've expressed these feelings well.  big hugs, ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
There is no defeat in winnning ... and you won! |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Ah LW, there is never defeat when we believe in ourselves and our confictions. I can really relate to this right now. Thanks for the read. *s* On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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Matrix69 New Member
since 2001-07-17
Posts 1 |
This is My first post here at pip but it will definatly not be my last, thanks for the poem.. keep writing, it was very good. But never give up... Take care! |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
Great expression of feelings, sometimes we all feel that way, but by writing about these negative feelings we conquer them. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
some extremely powerful lines too too sad, though, I'll get in line with Logan, too |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Logan: Yes, I need to rest. The road is long and hard. Thank you for your words, they mean a lot. Kathleen: NEVER!!!!!!!!! Zinsser: I'm sorry you relate. Just a pondering here, no need to worry. Thanks and (((((hugs to you))))) Sue: Thanks much. sp: Glad you enjoyed, thanks for stopping by. Marge: You are right about that. My spirit is free. Cpat: Thanks, and Logan is very wise. Vicky: I try to do my best. Thank you! Interloper: Gentle Spirit: I believe in me and I know everything will be just fine. Sorry you late. You're welcome, my friend. Matrix69: I am honored by your reply. I hope you stick around for more. There are many talented poets here. I'll never give up, I can tell you that! Welcome to our circle of friends. walker: Writing is therapy, I believe that with all my heart. Negative feelings need an outlet just like positive feelings. Writing provides that outlet for those who are wise enough to utilize it's powers. Thank you! VAS: Aw, not too sad. Cleansing and refreshing. Look at it that way. All writing comes |
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