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snowpants
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0 posted 2001-09-09 09:51 AM




If I tried with every part of my ability,
Do you think I could recapture
The mysterious magic of this day?
After the raindrops have scattered
And the clouds have parted ways,
Will this flare remain lit?
Down the roads I so travel,
Along the paths I so tread,
I sense you in my veins,
Carry you in the depths of the affection
That you have so certainly attained.
My thread surges with the flow of your words;
The rush by which I am taken is derived
From the meticulously thunderous heat in your eyes.
I walked down this street today,
Wondering how the tide rises,
But you were not in view when I turned to ask...
I tried to access you with an intent gaze,
But the distance just impaired its direction.
Oh, baby, it just seems the more I need you,
The greater the space between us...
If I tried with all of my might,
Do you think I could recapture
The mysterious magic of this day?
After the raindrops have scattered
And the clouds have parted ways,
Will this flare remain lit?

-kh

tried to write a letter
to tell you how I feel,
but all I kept on writing
was slipping on the tears from the day...

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Charisma
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1 posted 2001-09-09 09:57 AM


Oh Snowpants, what a fabulous write....I do hope that you may recapture the mysterious magic of this day...

((hugs))
Charisma

Janet Marie
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2 posted 2001-09-09 02:11 PM


I sense you in my veins,
Carry you in the depths of the affection
That you have so certainly attained.
My thread surges with the flow of your words;
The rush by which I am taken is derived
From the meticulously thunderous heat in your eyes.

I walked down this street today,
Wondering how the tide rises,
But you were not in view when I turned to ask...
I tried to access you with an intent gaze,
But the distance just impaired its direction.
Oh, baby, it just seems the more I need you,
The greater the space between us...
========================================

oh I love this one....the intensity,
the ache of the emotions and longing wrapped in images of the ocean and devotion ...
very cool..BUT ....
you better be careful...
all this talk of flames and flares???
someone might think you been hanging around a moth or something (hehe)  
those lines I bolded....WAAY cool...
so you've met Rob Thomas then?? ROFLAMO
very well done poetess frostpockets  

Well I looked to the sky for my anthem
The words and the music came through
But words and music can never touch
The beauty that I've seen in you

RosePetal
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3 posted 2001-09-09 03:00 PM


Beautifully done..you sure do have a way with your words..I like it a lot

<3 RosePetal

Marge Tindal
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4 posted 2001-09-09 06:52 PM


SnowPants~
I so enjoy reading the soft sincerity in your pieces.
*gentle hugs and smiles*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
                                   noles1@totcon.com            

SEA
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5 posted 2001-09-09 07:02 PM


wow, this is so beautiful.......
I liked this very much  

Enchantress
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6 posted 2001-09-09 07:25 PM


I enjoyed this so much.  I think Marge hit it right on...your words are so sincere.  Very well written.  Nancy.

~Time has cast a spell on you
  so you won't ever forget me~

shadow974
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7 posted 2001-09-09 09:03 PM


Beautiful!!

Throw your heart out in front of you
And run out to catch it.
ARAB PROVERB

rwood
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8 posted 2001-09-10 06:38 AM


Do you think I could recapture
The mysterious magic of this day?
After the raindrops have scattered
And the clouds have parted ways,
Will this flare remain lit?
I think you did! I think it will! Wonderful verse SP!

Sincerely,
Regina

snowpants
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9 posted 2001-09-19 07:03 PM


Hey guys...I know it's ridiculously late, BUT, I've been away, so that's my story and I'm stickin' to it...

Charisma:  thank you, my friend...I do too!  Glad you liked this!  

J:  thanks girlie...hmmm...better heed that advice... ...AND, you are too funny...do you think I'd be sitting here THIS calmly if I had met him??    that'd mean I'd have to be totally numb to life...hehe...

Rosepetal:  thank you so much...I truly appreciate your kind words!  

Marge:  thanks, m'friend...I am happy you enjoyed...

SEA:  thanks!  glad you liked it!  

Nancy:  thank you, too!  I appreciate your reply!  

shadow:  thanks!  

Regina:  you are so kind...thank you so much!  

sp  

tried to write a letter
to tell you how I feel,
but all I kept on writing
was slipping on the tears from the day...

passing shadows
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10 posted 2004-06-01 04:08 AM


makes me think
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