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Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

0 posted 2001-09-08 08:51 AM

Rewrite:

A blade of Bone.

Love garners new.
Like morning gathers dew.

A sentient dawn
Buds fragile passions
Searching for mystiques
Fashioned fantasies.

Stretched hands grasp
At nothings total.
Lucid placebos.
With thorns of rue.

Tic-toc swings the pendulum
Riotously the night tarries
The sun spills red
The guillotine drops.

A basket catches
Sliced nape.
And the head empties
Rivers.

Life is a mystery and a key.
Drawn from the oceans and the sea.

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

1 posted 2001-09-08 09:05 AM

Love garners new.
Like morning gathers dew.

A sentient dawn
Buds fragile passions
Searching for mystiques
Fashioned fantasies.

Stretched hands grasp
At nothings total.
Lucid placebos.
With thorns of rue.
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Ahhh my POEt of wisdom....
how clever of you...
I dont think I recall this one..so rare you dabble in free verse...
but you wrapped it in prologes & epilogs of rhyme.
very cool Stinky...youre just full of surprises

*WW*

me

Well I looked to the sky for my anthem
The words and the music came through
But words and music can never touch
The beauty that I've seen in you

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2001-09-08 09:16 AM

With the tic of tocking clock
you keep life's mysteries under lock

Well done Sy! Thank you!

Nan

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

3 posted 2001-09-08 09:39 AM

Just a break in the norm... This time I like your opening couplet best, Sweet Sy..

"Love garners new
Like morning gathers dew.."

Very kewl...

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

4 posted 2001-09-08 12:39 PM

JM, Sunshine and Nan,
You are like my three faithful musketeers.
And I am blessed with your friendship. One for all and I love you all.

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

5 posted 2001-09-08 01:52 PM

Seymour~
I felt myself wandering in a garden of your phrases~
Wonderful !
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
[email protected]

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

6 posted 2001-09-08 02:17 PM

Marge,
You can wander in my garden any time. Hugs & kisses.

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