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kaile

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since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

0 posted 2001-09-07 11:51 PM

soaked in pounding rain,
umbrellas pop together~
sheltered guys move on,
not thinking they may be toys
controlled as such by angels

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

1 posted 2001-09-07 11:56 PM

Alright...... great idea and well done!

                          "sheltered guys move on,
                           not thinking they may be toys
                           controlled as such by angels"

Very interesting!

Sven

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since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

2 posted 2001-09-08 11:38 AM

ah, I like this image my friend. . . to think that we're all just "puppets" of a sort. . .

great job. . .

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dgvarner
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since 2000-05-13

Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida

3 posted 2001-09-09 10:00 PM

not thinking they may be toys
controlled as such by angels

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hmm..amazing what lust will do eh! or love, at times...

enjoyed this kaile

hugs, g

~dgvarner/fallen rain~

"i've been lonely too long..now i'm ready to be loved too much.." ty herndon

dgvarner
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since 2000-05-13

Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida

4 posted 2001-09-09 10:02 PM

...i dunno..i read this two different ways..LOL

could be, we as earth dwellers are the angels "play things"..?

either way..interesting write my friend..

hugs, g

Duncan
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since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

5 posted 2001-09-09 10:31 PM

The thought reminds me of a book called 'The God Game' by Andrew Greeley. Interesting and very nicely writen.

Balladeer

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since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

6 posted 2001-09-09 10:46 PM

Interesting how easily we are conditioned by superior and outside forces....you describe it very well..

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

7 posted 2001-09-09 11:06 PM

Kaile~
Very, very nicely done~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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kaile

Member Ascendant

since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

8 posted 2001-09-10 08:04 AM

thank you all for your comments

this thought struck me when i was about to cross the road and i saw several people opening their umbrellas at the same time, as if being remote controlled by a higher being above...

dgvarner, will be very interested to hear of your first reading about lust..i try to derive that reading but alas, couldn't...

nonetheless, i think its way cool that you got two different readings..makes me happy

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