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RosePetal
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0 posted 2001-09-07 02:59 PM


He left me a gift by the door
The box was wrapped beautifully
To my surprise, not a thing inside
Empty, like his emotions for me

I put all our photos in the box
and closed the lid
Trying desperately to forget the memories
Of all the things we did

Grabbing a lighter
Knowing just what to do
I set it on fire
In hopes you feel me burning you

There was a pic of you smiling
Where and when was that?
Scream, Scream as the flames eat you
You always liked your meat burnt black

My world revolved around you
Until you kicked me away like a stray dog
What a subtle way you have
To show me where I belong

Your gift wasnt what I expected
It got me pissed
It wasnt the cheap amount
It's your insensitive thought that didn't count

You didn't think of how I'd feel
After I opened that box
I knew your love wasnt real

I'm at the pit of the ocean
That's what I get for thinking
Only my desire to live
Has kept me from sinking

© Copyright 2001 Joanna - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-09-07 03:09 PM


wow what a jerk, you are better off without him. The ocean won't let you drown, no, it will carry you to love   (((HUGS)))
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2 posted 2001-09-07 04:13 PM


I lOved the Poem .. your use of words is incredible... was this poem speaking of a true event?? if so .. you dont need a guy like that in your life... keep writing

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3 posted 2001-09-07 04:32 PM


SEA: Thank you for reading my poem
(( HUGS BACK ))

GhostWriter_6: Well, it was about an ex bf who broke up with me for no apparent reason.
I kept asking him for a reason but he would never give me one. I thought I at least deserved some kind of explanation as to why he was breaking my heart..So the idea of an empty box came to my head! Thanks for the
compliments. ((hugs))

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4 posted 2001-09-07 04:54 PM


heartfelt penned....excellent done.


(((warm hugs))
Charisma

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5 posted 2001-09-07 05:01 PM




heartfelt write....
The idea of the empty box gives it more power....

well-done....

Thank you
*********************

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6 posted 2002-02-10 12:20 PM




(tears fall down my cheeks) What a jerk, ohhhhh, I'm so sorry you had to go through all of that before, my heart goes out to you! (kiss on lips) So sad but well-written, sweet friend, you deserve so much more, for you are a very beautiful and compassionate, loving person and I love you so much! (kisses) You have such a beautiful heart, my love, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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7 posted 2002-02-14 09:15 PM


thank you hunnie! (hugs) I know u would never do that to me
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