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The Color of Merlot
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The Color of Merlot |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
So it was Once Not now But once A soft afternoon of raindrops Feather bed of white Crystal with Merlot to sip Accented with fiery embraces Wrapped in you Bed sheets tangled in legs I wanted nothing more Than the touch of soft hands And loving heart So it was once Once Not now But once Fast forgotten time Demanding more of day and mind Stretching rubber banded lives Drove breaking partings Anger yours Pain Ours Then alone for both in separate Struggling hours So it is now Not then But now Memories remain Times relished then again bring smiles And soft rain still Reminds me of Merlot and You |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Ebb and flow soft and hard warm and cold mirror's shard broken once veined forever Wonderful! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh how wonderfully beautiful!! This is just too good for me to try to extract one particular section...yes, the ebb and flow of the entire write is spectacular. Love it!! ~Time has cast a spell on you |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
I sat down here for just a second before going to work, then I read this over and over. Now I'm going to be late. It was well worth it. Amazing how well this communicates not with the words only but also by the rhythm and repetion of the single word...once. |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
oh this is wonderful, the form and repetition so truly compliment the feelings this portrays.......really nicely done |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Merlot....mmmm...you don't play fair! And? I had other comments, but I think I'll just say I enjoyed and leave it at that!  |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
You sculpt emotions with artisan's words until a story vividly emerges -- one that, somehow, seems personal to the reader, even though it may never have happened to him or her -- such is the power of your writing. -MVS "It's all in the details -- the Big Picture always takes care of itself." |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Once... more? Lovely! *smiles* ~Tier |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
This is just too good.... Life busting into love ... memories but not the now... ~Connie~ |
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SEA 
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
you brought tears to my eyes......I love this |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nicely done...James |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Oh my, this is one of the best yet.. Memories are golden, no matter how they hurt.. Sandra |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
wonderfully woven span of a relationship with a tender, tender ending...a fine piece |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Cpat Hair - this is most beautiful... BC |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Memories of Merlot - Magnifique... |
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shadow974 Senior Member
since 2001-06-21
Posts 636Michigan |
excelent write Cpat. ...Once... Throw your heart out in front of you |
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The Rusty Knight Member
since 2001-08-29
Posts 414Texas |
I raise my glass and say "cheers" to this one. Death comes not when we cease to breathe, but when we cease to dream. |
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Just A Woman Senior Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 507 |
Ah........the memories of love. Thank God for those. Well done, Capt Hair. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Capt--emotive and real..great write! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
CPatHair~ The bouquet is wonderful~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Cpat- This is so softly penned...it practically whispers... Very emotional and touching write. Hugs, ~vicky "...a heartbeat in every syllable..." |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
Enchanting poem, love it. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Wrapped in you Bed sheets tangled in legs I wanted nothing more Than the touch of soft hands And loving heart So it was once Once lovely thoughts, C..as always, I enjoyed ~Wynter |
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