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1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2001-09-07 09:18 AM



A Little Of You

if you knew
that I loved you
would you save me
your tomorrow
the happiness
it could bring
today is worth
a little sorrow
could there be
such a cost
always empty
due to the loss
and take a chance
in all that lacks
some day be able
to give something back
a small bit of love
is no big task
a little of you
is all I ask

"...the rest is silence" (Hamlet)  Shakespeare

© Copyright 2001 Helen Chambers - All Rights Reserved
Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
1 posted 2001-09-07 09:21 AM


Slick,
You have my best wishes, enjoyed.

Zinsser
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Calif.
2 posted 2001-09-07 09:26 AM


Beautiful plea.....
~Connie~

SEA
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with you
3 posted 2001-09-07 09:30 AM


oh, this is wonderful......
I like this very much.  

MyEnchanted_Melody
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since 2001-05-30
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across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be.
4 posted 2001-09-07 10:20 AM



a little of you
is all I ask

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It is such a small task
and yet foe some it seems
more like a huge unbearable mask


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Lovely.....so beautifully expressed

I loved it.....

Thank you
**************************

"Oh...me!Oh Life!
Of the questions of these recurring..........
Of myself forever reproaching myself,
for who more foolish than I......"
~Whitman~

LngJhnAg
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5 posted 2001-09-07 11:40 AM


Helen, this is melancholic - very nice pace
catalinamoon
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6 posted 2001-09-07 12:43 PM


Oh, very nice poem, and speaks my heart almost exactly. A little should not be too much to ask, should it?
Sandra

Bill Charles
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highways, & byways, for now
7 posted 2001-09-08 03:04 PM


1slick_lady - this verse is most precious. I hope that you don't mind the rest...

if you knew
that I loved you
would you save me
your tomorrow

tomorrow you would not
see if I loved you,
as today
would never end

BC


GhostWriter_6
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since 2001-09-03
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??Amityville??
8 posted 2001-09-08 04:12 PM


Loved this poem.... keep it up

*GhostWriter_6*

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