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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Don’t ask me if I will talk to you for a few minutes-- You know I’d carry on a conversation with you forever. Don’t ever doubt if I’m satisfied with this life-- My only essential goal is to be right for your smile. The moon is hanging there for your approval; The stars put on that show to astound you. The earth coordinates its revolution Around the ambiance of your expressions. Why do you marvel at the turning in of the sun? The hues lose their seduction next to your eyes’ glimmer. How could you be in awe of the overshadowing shine? The scent of your spirit eclipses the brightest of galaxies. Not a cloud in the sky dares come close; The birds sing only choice melodies when you arrive. The ocean measures its tides and mists precisely To reach your feet when you wander the beach And stroke your face as you focus on the deep. Don’t ask me if I will talk to you for a few minutes-- You know I’d carry on a conversation with you forever. Don’t ever doubt if I’m satisfied with this life-- My only essential goal is to be right for your smile. -kh tried to write a letter |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
this reads like a song, a beautiful song  |
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cruz Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 282Dallas,Texas USA |
originality rocks! some gr8 content here and very well organized. especially liked: "And stroke your face as you focus on the deep." |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The moon is hanging there for your approval; The stars put on that show to astound you. The earth coordinates its revolution Around the ambiance of your expressions. Why do you marvel at the turning in of the sun? The hues lose their seduction next to your eyes’ glimmer. How could you be in awe of the overshadowing shine? The scent of your spirit eclipses the brightest of galaxies. Not a cloud in the sky dares come close; The birds sing only choice melodies when you arrive. The ocean measures its tides and mists precisely To reach your feet when you wander the beach And stroke your face as you focus on the deep. ======================================= OH MAN ... what a very very cool poem...... Im so diggin the imagery here.... The whole premise behind the poem is very cool, clever, and creative, uniquely YOU... like i said way cool and groovy too  excellent write poetess snowbooty  jm A man who asks a woman to lie for him, is a man who will lie to that woman. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SnowPants~ Such intoxicating thoughts set the air-waves vibrating~ 'Why do you marvel at the turning in of the sun? The hues lose their seduction next to your eyes’ glimmer.' Lovely lilting piece with such feeling~ Real nice - real nice~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Ah, what a lucky soul t'would be to be on the receiving end of such adorative lament. What Love and devotion. |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
I agree with RSW. It is a wonderful tribute to a loved one. alan |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
SEA: thank you so much...I am glad you liked this! cruz: thank you kindly...I appreciate your kind reply! glad you enjoyed! J: hey...thanks so much, girlie...your enthusiastic comments always make me feel so much better about how I've written... ...so, I guess you could say you're great for my poetic ego...  ...anyway...don't ask...glad you liked, J! Marge: thanks, m'friend, for your reply...I am happy you liked it! Richard: thank you...I believe we are both lucky souls for finding what we have...I appreciate your reply! Alan: thank you, too! glad you liked it! sp  tried to write a letter |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Awesome, Kris! Very beautifully expressed! |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Hey Denise...thanks so much! I'm glad you liked it! sp |
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