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Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

0 posted 2001-09-05 11:46 PM

Schisms

Time has left a gap wide enough
to slip in,
swim across,
and climb this mesa.

Out of your range,
it's safe to say
there was a potent attraction
in being your captive.
Once.

Now, you have withdrawn
into your own oasis
of neon palms,
plenty of sun
but no warmth.

From my side of the gulf
I stand tough,
volte-faced
from your east.

© 2001 Corinne Bailey

[This message has been edited by Corinne (edited 09-06-2001).]

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

1 posted 2001-09-06 07:55 AM

very clever employ of imagery and metaphor...
elements of nature, blended with artistic visuals, creative and original write C,
well done poetess

jm

A man who asks a woman to lie for him, is a man who will lie to that woman.
A woman who lies for a man, is a woman who lies to herself.
(vise versa)

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2001-09-06 08:25 AM

You've gotta love those moments of schism...

Thanks for this, Corinne!

RMW
Senior Member

since 2001-03-21

Posts 1424

3 posted 2001-09-07 10:50 AM

Corinne....you've edited this. Well done, as always. Bob

Nan

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

4 posted 2001-09-07 11:03 AM

It's really quite astounding how time can extinguish our once burning flames... Nicely written imagery, C...

LngJhnAg
Member Elite

since 1999-07-23

Posts 3508
Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion

5 posted 2001-09-07 11:22 AM

Corinne -

Way up here on the mesa
The view is panoramic.
You didn't write this for me,
So I've no cause to panic.

I love the way you pen your lines,
With such emotional realism,
Only I wish I could see more
Of your decolletegic schism.

As always, Corinne - I love your style.

[This message has been edited by LngJhnAg (edited 09-07-2001).]

Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

6 posted 2001-09-07 07:11 PM

Thank you, JM!

Sunshine, thanks!

Bob, yes, and it still isn't there yet. '

Nan, how true, and thanks!

LngJhnAg - what a great poetic response, I thank you, sir!

decolletegic schism!!! oh my!

Cor

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