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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Rewrite: Shadows I watched my shadow stretch the ground In motions that were just like mine Awake with me without a sound And mirror me like pantomime. It seemed to move like puppetry Fathered by the sun, a clone. In lesser light in mimicry Mothered by an objects loan. No feel of pain, pleasure or strife Without our blood tissue and bone Reborn each light into new life Brought into this world full grown. Made of shifting mediums sprawl Chameleon like abilities Transparent and in constant fall With hide and seek alacrity. An ever dark and brooding base Light induced, but never a face. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Seymour - excellent write, and tells the images of a shadow..., and more... BC |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
It seemed to move like puppetry Fathered by the sun, a clone. In lesser light in mimicry Mothered by an objects loan. No feel of pain, pleasure or strife Without our blood tissue and bone Reborn each light into new life Brought into this world full grown. Made of shifting mediums sprawl Chameleon like abilities Transparent and in constant fall With hide and seek alacrity. An ever dark and brooding base Light induced, but never a face. ================================= ahh my Stinky I would shadow dance with you anytime  there are so many cool lines in this... so...does Randy have a shadow *L* *winkiewinkie*  me Feels like Im dancing with truth and wisdom |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
To some a shadow may just be life gone black of light for thee but in your dark, still a shine for there the reach, and the wind... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Bill, Thanks for the excellent and more. JM, Some day I'll catch you on the breeze My little Tinker Bell and tease. Randy's blowing smoke again And keeps asking where and when? Beautiful abstract, Winkiewinkie Stinky |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Decaflame, True the Shadow may show the wind but does not feel it. Thanks |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Spurs thought, great imagination. Do shadows get to sleep? |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
very nicely done... enjoyed this a great deal. You write well...and it is always a pleasure to read that which is written well.. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
RSWells, But of course, thank you. Cpat Hair, And you comment well and that is a pleasure too. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
yes, good writing is always a pleasure to read...well done! RSWells---that sounds like a poem coming, I hope you do one...I'm wondering if I can keep from it...let's see...the night the shadows slept...or the day, that might be more frightening if that's what one has a mind to do...sounds like something that should be put in the poetry challenge |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
I enjoyed this one a lot, Sy -- very well written. I can picture Tim Burton running with this one... maybe "A Nightmare Before Christmas-II" with a macabre yet seductive score by Elfman...? -MVS "If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn." |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
VAS, Nice comment, thank you. Mark, Good Idea, thanks for the read. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Wonderful, Sy. I looked for mine last night, but nary a shadow  |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
ennjoy |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Another magical poem. I liked the 2nd stanza best Anothe rone for the treasure chest Liz |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Interloper, So what were you doing in the dark? LOL Vandana, You welcome and thanks. Elizabeth, So nice to read your comment. Sy |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Sy, Wonderful imagery in this one and thought provoking as well, side note, Tim Burton is my dads cousin I bet he would be fun to listen to!!!!! enjoyed much Sy, Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Cerenity, Wonderful reply, I'm learning all sorts of things with Shadows. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I thought I saw the two of you strolling down the avenue!!! well written once again, Sy...your shadow is growing.. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I thought I saw the two of you strolling down the avenue!!! well written once again, Sy...your shadow is growing.. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
once when I walked calm in flight I wondered if shadows entered in night for I saw shadows in light of day sometimes followed, or led the way... HUGS |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Balladeer, I thank both you and your shadow. Clever. Sunshine, We both send our *L* |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
fascinating things shadows are, aren't they... this poem reminds me of the time when i was interested in haiku and attempted to write some about shadows.... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Faterider, Once again I thank you for the read and like. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Seymour~ More of you to enjoy~ Oh, boy - oh, boy ! Oh, boy - oh, boy ! More of you to enjoy~ Love n' hugs Love n' hugs ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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