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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
He listened The grief shown on face Plastered from other times Painted anew with the words Divisions Strained comforting exchanged With coyote wariness Remembering Denouncing son for embarrassing threatened stature in small town public knowing he was different Alone now In the ways and days of before Grief drives home in blow After strike That all the plaster in the world Can’t fill some holes Later… When his turn came to go I painted on my face of grief And explored the voids left By it all |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
There's at least as much to ponder here for the reader, Ron... The last stanza, especially. Many lessons and truths in life -- not all of them light ones. -MVS "It's all in the details -- the Big Picture always takes care of itself." |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
This hurts.... |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Very dark, Captain, and mysterious. Corinne |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
deeply felt, dear friend, and understood... Good read, as always... ~Tier |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
Cpat, "I painted on my grief face" I really know what you mean here. And I know I did it for others, not for me 'cuz I really didn't care. Sad, dark, truthful. ME |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
I painted on my face of grief I have to agree with ME, this line stood out for me also. You write so personally that it's often difficult for me to suspend the belief that you have experienced your subject matter. A father should teach many things, this isn't one of them. There's a whole world available to shame us...parents should be apart from it. I relate. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
CPatHair~ Depth and intensity~ Very nicely penned. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Cpat Hair, so very sad and so intense! Great write!  Sauni @~~~>~~ |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
The depths of a father. How sad we don't realize sometimes the pain inside you wonderful men. Very moving C. Sincerely, Regina |
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Sadly, I can empathize with nearly every line of this work, Cpat... Well done, indeed. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Cpat Hair, Well done excellent write. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
heartfelt write, very intense.... enjoyed the read! Charisma |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
The feeling is so deep, I wanted to glance away, as if to avoid more pain. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
God ... what are we as humans doing to our children.... so many things in life to put us down and out.... Have learned in life that I can choose new family for my support, and If I choose to continue a relationship with blood family then its as they are... whatever that may means to me.. sometimes that means smile and breath LOL ~Connie~ |
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