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VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

0 posted 2001-09-03 12:26 PM

I don't come here much anymore because I'm so invisible when I do, but I really wanted to share this morning with you. It's as if the environment really knows about our measurement of time and the 'rituals' we follow by its marking.

Can You Feel It?

can you feel it?

can you smell it?
     I sense the edge of it both with skin and nose

and just now, in the trickle of the wooden chimes
     I could hear it’s coming

certainly summer, too, had the edge of warm in the early morn
     but now, as the cool hangs on to a later hour,
     the warm dwindles in its power

yet autumn caresses my cheeks and arms
     the gentle breeze kisses and charms
     the heart of me

it’s strange how the air feels like
     ‘school starting’ air
     ‘bell-ringing air’
     school books, desks and chairs
     filled to the brim
     with her and him and Tim

hopscotch and volleyball
     soccer and shining halls
     echoing laughter, excitement and joy
     of greeting friends and new faces

that’s what tomorrow brings
     when the school bell rings

© September 3, 2001

what’s really strange...it’s still way too warm for such a thing, but I could almost smell and feel the wood smoke of autumn fireplaces...maybe someone was having breakfast on the barbie *smile*

[This message has been edited by VAS (edited 09-03-2001).]

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

1 posted 2001-09-03 12:48 PM

YES!! I feel it, and you penned my exact thoughts so well. I know I am not alone when I say I always feel a bit depressed this time of year. Autumn...the year's last, lovliest smile is almost here. Enjoyed this so much! Thank you. Nancy Lee.

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain~

Sunnyone
Member Ascendant

since 2000-07-06

Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England

2 posted 2001-09-03 12:49 PM

Yes......up here I DO feel it!!

And the wood stoves are burning, the Autumn rains have come, and the kiddies are back in school. Great one, VAS, as always you do, and you should still come here often to say hi to your old friends, like me!!!!

The road goes on forever, and the stories never end...

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

3 posted 2001-09-03 01:01 PM

Thank you both so much. It's good to know others can sense this change as well. At least I'm not imagining it just because the calendar says autumn is fast approaching.

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

4 posted 2001-09-03 01:46 PM

You've never been invisible to me! I've always enjoyed your work!
This a precious poem and tommorrow this setting becomes real. I think it's great virtual reality for the reader to visualize and it's painted within your words.
Well done my friend!

The Rusty Knight
Member

since 2001-08-29

Posts 414
Texas

5 posted 2001-09-03 02:02 PM

We can't feel it in Texas till Dec., but I felt it in you words. *S*

Death comes not when we cease to breath, but when we cease to dream.

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

6 posted 2001-09-03 02:02 PM

thanks, loads, ethome!

Yep school starts tomorrow in many cities. The town where I live is a week later than all the other districts close by. Partly because there's been construction going on to frantically be finished enough for kids/students to reenter buildings. AND we have one entirely new building, our fifth elementary school, Desert View, opening Tues.

I wonder if I can get myself to go crash the party and watch it happen. LOL. Maybe I could write my next article in our local paper about it. I'm sure there will be regular, mainstream, articles. but I write a column that is conversational and pondering in style. So, hopefully I'd render a different flavor.

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

7 posted 2001-09-03 02:06 PM

Vas, Yes, I feel it. Every year at this time. A certain sadness, a longing. Well done.

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

8 posted 2001-09-03 02:17 PM

R.K. and Nightshade, thank you for reading and for the sweet comments. R.K. I was in San Antonio, Texas from November through March back in 1966/67. I must say the weather was pretty mild compared to that time in Salem, Oregon where I grew up, chronologically. Coming from a place where rain was might prevalent, it was quite an amazing thing when the San Antonio schools closed due to rain. Of course, the flooding, though not severe that year, is what caused the closures.

Nightshade, I don't recall seeing your name before, but then I have senior moments, where names are concerned, quite often. I find myself wondering if you write mostly dark poetry as your pseudo makes me think of "Deadly Nightshade."

I'm going looking for a piece by you.

Tracey
Member Elite

since 2001-08-29

Posts 2808
where insanity meets breeding

9 posted 2001-09-03 02:22 PM

No, no I don't want to feel it. I want to believe it's still summer.

Damn it. You MADE me feel it with your words

Tracey

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

Zinsser
Senior Member

since 2001-02-27

Posts 1641
Calif.

10 posted 2001-09-03 02:34 PM

VAS: Yes I feel it too....
     I love the summer, the heat, the sky
      The moons....  My kids go back to
     school tomarrow and for about a half a
    second I will miss them too...  LOL
     Great Write!!!

Thank You
~~~Connie~~~

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

11 posted 2001-09-03 02:36 PM

Well, technically, it is still summer in North America until September 22 EST on my calendar. Ha-ha-ha-ha, the east coast gets it first. I'm way.............. out west.

thanks for reading, Tracey, and for your fun comment.

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

12 posted 2001-09-03 02:38 PM

Thanks Zinnser! Sure enjoyed your comment.

ggrn3
Member

since 2000-08-17

Posts 433
Nahunta Georgia U.S.

13 posted 2001-09-03 04:33 PM

VAS

This was an enchanting post. And yes, I can feel it, and I actually love the feeling. People seem to dress up more and they look so much better. and the different colors of Autumn seem to dress up Mother Nature. The smell of wood burning fires seems to be a natural perfume for "her" also. Step out your door and adore Mother Nature and inhale her perfume. Don't let it take your breath away.

Garfield

The Lonely Stranger
Member

since 1999-06-18

Posts 361
Upstate, NY, USA

14 posted 2001-09-03 07:23 PM

I think we are all more invisible. The more people who join, the faster the poems sink off of page one. Thus we are all read less and commented on less, just the dynamics. I read the front page and then I do what I call mining. I start at the back page and work toward the front.

No one ever listened themselves into trouble.

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

15 posted 2001-09-03 08:14 PM

Wow! Lonely, that's a good technique and very thoughtful.

I have, at times, looked for the poems with the fewest comments to read and comment to, though I know that that could keep me from reading a real treasure that many have read and enjoyed. But then, there just may be treasures that few are finding because they don't go in. So maybe it works out okay, too. Thanks for the response to my preface.

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

16 posted 2001-09-03 09:12 PM

You can tell when school starts around here because there are about 20,000 more cars on the road creating a major traffic jam...we be jammin...James

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

17 posted 2001-09-03 11:09 PM

heh heh heh, that's what I understand occurs around Seattle, WA area, too.

Thanks for reading.

Krawdad
Member Elite

since 2001-01-03

Posts 2597

18 posted 2001-09-04 12:16 PM

Enjoyed this, V.
I'm so season sensitive that I missed it when I lived in the islands. The islands were indeed sensual, but I still missed the stimulus of the seasons.
Thanks.
e

GhostWriter_6
Member

since 2001-09-03

Posts 237
??Amityville??

19 posted 2001-09-04 01:36 PM

VAS,

im definately feeling it here in North Carolina....

keep up the good work

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

20 posted 2001-09-04 02:02 PM

thanks Krawdad and Ghost Writer...for reading and commenting...yes the seasons are an important part of the year's passing.

in autumn, things are growing tired from their hard work of the growing season...then their reward is to rest in the winter months while awaiting the promise of spring, rebirth, new life, rejuvenation.

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