Undressing Edna St Vincent Millay - A Sonnet

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Wes Utica
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0 posted 2001-09-02 10:13 PM

UNDRESSING EDNA ST. VINCENT MILLAY

I start with your hat, a dark velvet cloche.
Next, your gloves, kid leather that caresses
your gentle hands; then the cameo brooch,
and pearls before I dare to touch your dress.
My hands divide your lacy camisole,
where shadows hint at what I'll soon possess
as your breasts rise and fall, and rise and fall
with each beat of your heart and quickening breath.
Here I would speak of loosening your qualms.
Too late, since you had cut your spirit loose
and offered inhibitions up like alms
to disburse your restless gifts as you chose.
Your words sustain me, are nourishing food.
Betray these dreams? I do not think I would.

Alan
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1 posted 2001-09-02 10:23 PM

Good job Wes. Really enjoyed it
alan

Jaime Fradera
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2 posted 2001-09-02 10:34 PM

This was the first one on here and the title begged me to read it. I have read little about her, that she couldn't define her boundaries, in in her wildness destroyed herself.
Who was she? ... how was she? ... what really happened to her? ...

Jaime

Victoria

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3 posted 2001-09-02 10:37 PM

Enjoyed your words Wes..nicely done..

~Victoria~

Wes Utica
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4 posted 2001-09-02 10:41 PM

Jaime - your description of her is pretty accurate. Who was she? Well, that's best answered by reading her. My poem is based on my favorite sonnet of her's "Love is Not All."

Tracey
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5 posted 2001-09-02 11:05 PM

Whoo. You had me sweating there

Tracey

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catalinamoon

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6 posted 2001-09-02 11:09 PM

Creative idea, and wonderfully done. Much enjoyed.
Sandra

Janet Marie
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7 posted 2001-09-02 11:22 PM

I start with your hat, a dark velvet cloche.
Next, your gloves, kid leather that caresses
your gentle hands; then the cameo brooch,
and pearls before I dare to touch your dress.
My hands divide your lacy camisole,
where shadows hint at what I'll soon possess
as your breasts rise and fall, and rise and fall
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this is pure poetic imagery overload...
wonderful vocabulary as well.
a lovely romantic, sensual sonnet.
Im delightfully sated in cadence

well done poet sir
jm

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A woman who lies for a man, is a woman who lies to herself.
(vise versa)

Martie

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8 posted 2001-09-02 11:23 PM

Wes--You did this very well...quite original.

Wes Utica
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9 posted 2001-09-03 01:45 PM

Janet Marie - again, a tribute to Ms Millay. In her poem "Love Is Not All," she uses the lines:
         Love is not all: it is not meat nor drink
         Nor slumber, nor a roof against the rain;
         Nor yet a floating spar to men that sink
         And rise and sink and rise and sink again;

Such an interesting woman. Such a great poet.

JamesMichael
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10 posted 2001-09-03 03:23 PM

Very interesting...James

doreen peri
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11 posted 2001-09-03 06:32 PM

yes!!!!!!

one of my favorite poets... hehe
nice job on this sonnet... very nice

Lady In White

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12 posted 2001-09-04 01:36 PM

This is excellent Wes! Thank you!

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