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Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

0 posted 2001-09-02 02:14 PM

Deadly Affair

Whisper hello to your Toxic Mistress
As you sneak her past me
In your pocket
Offer her food and hot drink
Into which she pours dust
From her locket.
Dance round with your Toxic Mistress
To a tune that makes you
Feel young.
You remember the words
But it's hard to sing them
With your ever thickening tongue.
Bid farewell to your Toxic Mistress
As her paranoia seeps into your pores.
Thank God you can't see the horror
As you convulse from her wrath
On the floor.

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

1 posted 2001-09-02 02:19 PM

NightShade~
What a powerfully poignant entry into Passions~
WOW !

Welcome to the friendship circle~
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
[email protected]

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

2 posted 2001-09-02 02:22 PM

Thankyou Marge......I have been afraid to post...everyone is so talented here. I appreciate the warm welcome.

Denise

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

3 posted 2001-09-02 02:23 PM

Yes, very powerful! Welcome to Passions! Please check your email for a special welcome!

Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

4 posted 2001-09-02 02:23 PM

Welcome to our family, Nightshade~

This was very powerful with an important message! You use an excellent phrase "toxic mistress" - very clever.

I look forward to more poetry by you

Take care,
Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

5 posted 2001-09-02 02:25 PM

Thankyou Melissa and thankyou Denise!! I am smilin' now.

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

6 posted 2001-09-02 02:37 PM

YES!! YES!! Nightshade..YOU have arrived!!
Welcome with love and hugs to Passions. You have made quite an impact with your first write posted here. Hope to see much more of you!
I'm really smiling now!!

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

7 posted 2001-09-02 02:39 PM

Thankyou Enchantress!!!

Sunshine

Administrator

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since 1999-06-25

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Listening to every heart

8 posted 2001-09-02 02:52 PM

An excellent entry to Passions! I look forward to reading much more from you! Welcome!

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

9 posted 2001-09-02 04:52 PM

wow, and welcome, what an intense entrance

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

10 posted 2001-09-02 07:28 PM

Welcome to Passions! Always good to welcome a fellow Canuck!

Love the reference to booze as a toxic mistress....Great poem to enter Passions with!

Have a nice day!

MoonShadow
Senior Member

since 2001-08-02

Posts 943
Dark side of the Moon.

11 posted 2001-09-02 07:34 PM

Vivid imagery that paints a sombre picture which would take the smile off many a face that comes face to face with reality. The Mistress wears many masks.. yet the addiction is powerful from all of them.  All want to dance to the tune of elusive youth, even if for but a moment.

    Excellent use of personification and metaphore to create an emotionaly dark allegory.

   I'd like to add my voice to also welcome you to Passions. Write on!

paladin

Senior Member

since 2001-08-05

Posts 930
Pensacola,Fl.

12 posted 2001-09-02 07:57 PM

You have added new meaning to fatal attraction.The most deadly mushroom is a pale
frail thing that looks very much like a common edible one.Welcome to passions.I look forward to reading more of your poems.

paladin

Tracey
Member Elite

since 2001-08-29

Posts 2808
where insanity meets breeding

13 posted 2001-09-02 07:59 PM

Oh my, what an amazingly powerful piece this is. On your reply above, you say you were afraid to post with all the talent here. I say that you too are one of the talented ones. Keep them coming

Tracey

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

The Rusty Knight
Member

since 2001-08-29

Posts 414
Texas

14 posted 2001-09-02 08:33 PM

Poets seem to find as many subjects as there are stars in the night. It is always in a poets heart to put their thoughts sing. You have done it well here.

Death comes not when we cease to breath, but when we cease to dream.

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

15 posted 2001-09-02 08:59 PM

An in-toxic-ating entrance. Hope you have more magical powdery words to sprinkle on these pages.
Midnitesun

Nightshade

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since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

16 posted 2001-09-02 10:49 PM

You all have been so kind with your welcoming words. Thankyou Thankyou

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

DawnG

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since 2000-06-23

Posts 1494
United States

17 posted 2001-09-02 11:02 PM

Welcome to Passions as well. I admit I wasnt sure what the title of the poem was dragging me into, but I really can appreciate the message you have portrayed here. Great write.

Dawn

Alan
Senior Member

since 2000-09-12

Posts 1499
right next door

18 posted 2001-09-02 11:10 PM

Wow Nightshade what a great start. Welcome to Passions. IT is nicely writen. I hope to
see more from you
alan

arthur
Senior Member

since 2001-08-14

Posts 678
england

19 posted 2001-09-03 02:21 PM

this is a very good work
It is exact and clear
it is also extremely evocative of a scene .
Intuition tells me that it could not have been written other than from first hand experiance
it is very good
but you dont need me to tell you
You should know that already
arthur

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

20 posted 2001-09-03 02:21 PM

Terribly powerful!

Now I see why I didn't recall your name, this one is your first post.

Welcome!

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

21 posted 2001-09-03 02:30 PM

Whew, this is very intense, great write.
Sandra

Voiceless
Senior Member

since 2001-02-19

Posts 686
Under the stars upon the wind

22 posted 2001-09-03 03:24 PM

I am sorry it has taken me so long
to welcome you! So..
WELCOME!!
This poem is very powerful.
The point is nice and clear
and made with ease, great job.
We are happy to have you here!

Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial)

MyEnchanted_Melody
Senior Member

since 2001-05-30

Posts 1106
across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be.

23 posted 2001-09-03 03:57 PM

A powerful write.......

Welcome to Passions......

Thank you
****************************

"Oh...me!Oh Life!
Of the questions of these recurring..........
Of myself forever reproaching myself,
for who more foolish than I......"
~Whitman~

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

24 posted 2001-09-03 04:19 PM

do I know how this is...wow!

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

25 posted 2001-09-03 06:19 PM

Many thanks everyone, and Arthur, your intuition is correct.

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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