Open Poetry #15 |
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short stuff |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
dripping down the page drifting through the sage cross desert sands at rage in the loneliness of plague © September 1, 2001 |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
Very Good!!!!! |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
I like it. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
thanks, you two, it seems short is good in some instances, like ducking under a barrage or a table ![]() thanks for reading |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
short maybe, but poignant and moving-yes. Big thought in such few words. I enjoyed Tracey If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Loved the words and the presentation! ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
thanks, E & T, for reading and commenting, glad you enjoyed, this is the first time I've had success getting the form to appear on this page the way I wanted it, save for the fact that I wanted the last line of the poem to be one ore two more lines down. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
this is clever and creative Virginia, the succinctity of it gave it the impact, and the rhyme and formating added to its unique style. I have problems getting things to cut, copy and space sometimes too... seems like last lines want to move up the page.... I just blame it on me being left handed ![]() well done poetess V jm A man who asks a woman to lie for him, is a man who will lie to that woman. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hey Virginia! I had to stop and smile a little because that's the start of a song. However, this is short stuff but it allows the reader to relate right along with you! Nicely done! I bet a real invisible woman couldn't write this well! |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
thanks JM glad you liked...I don't know if it's our hands, left or right, cuz even when we seem to do all we can think of...it still comes up, well, different--I think it's cyber-poltergeists, maybe |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Some of you people sure know how to squeeze in in between a post and a reply. Thanks, again, ethome, for your sweet message to my write. You are so kind. |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
VAS Short, but flowing. Very creative. Short is good. Garfield |
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