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Open Poetry #15

No Point Made

1slick_lady
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since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2001-08-30 10:08 PM

No Point Made

can you see
who I am inside
when things of me
I clearly hide
sometimes no tears
from eyes pour
for smiles can cover
a pains décor

no point is made
in pointlessness
and silence is
no word in express
at times there is
no trust for the giving
torn hearts don’t die
they keep on living

"...the rest is silence" (Hamlet) Shakespeare

[This message has been edited by 1slick_lady (edited 08-30-2001).]

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2001-08-30 10:25 PM

wow Helen, this is fantastic.

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

2 posted 2001-08-30 10:39 PM

Helen,

Really like what this had to say, but two lines I stumbled over...from eyes in pour & no word in express... (the word "in" in particular in the usage). Broke the flow...other than that...beautiful write.

jwesley

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

3 posted 2001-08-31 08:48 AM

Very nice, enjoyed

Gloom

Jenn Cirrincione

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since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

4 posted 2001-08-31 08:49 AM

Very good job. I loved the way it flowed.

Jenn

"Baby I've been drifting away, dreaming all day, of holding you, touching you, the only thing that I wanna do is be with you..."Faith Hill

Zinsser
Senior Member

since 2001-02-27

Posts 1641
Calif.

5 posted 2001-08-31 09:32 AM

Beautiful!

Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

6 posted 2001-08-31 12:41 PM

Awesome Poem, Helen!

Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

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