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Focus of Radiance - sonnet
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Focus of Radiance - sonnet |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
 He watches me though eyes of sweet adore. No light is dimmed before the passion fades. The moon awaits its turn to shine in jade. A walk tonight along love’s placid shore brings peace to life within this soul’s lost core. When nighttime shimmers reach our den’s cascade they hold their sparks and pause until love’s made. Oh I cannot contain my thirst for more. In sheer delight each moment rides on high completely satisfied with tide’s effect on domination’s loss of power brands-- with love it now must utterly comply. By dawn the spotlight shone on bliss direct returns to splendor’s rightful owner’s hands. -kh (this is my attempt at the Italian/Petrarchan style sonnet  )tried to write a letter |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Oh, Kris, this is absolutely stunning! Excellent, excellent excellent! I do believe that you are a natural! |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
You paint a serene image and wrote a good sonnet. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SnowPants~ This is quite stunning poetry~ It flows so gently~ Good show, girl !  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
He watches me though eyes of sweet adore. No light is dimmed before the passion fades. The moon awaits its turn to shine in jade. A walk tonight along love’s placid shore brings peace to life within this soul’s lost core. When nighttime shimmers reach our den’s cascade they hold their sparks and pause until love’s made. Oh I cannot contain my thirst for more. ================================= By dawn the spotlight shone on bliss direct returns to splendor’s rightful owner’s hands. ================================== Kris this really is very well done... the imagery is stunning and the emotions the images are wrapped in is pure poetry... and what a delight this was to read aloud... youre doing these like rhyme is second skin. very cool girlie..very me "oh you speak to me in riddles |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This is Absolutely Exquisite Superb!!! I will read this over and over LIz |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
wonderful write...imagery very good, language good... nicely done.. very nicely done |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Denise: why thank you, m'friend...I do appreciate your kind words...glad you like it! RSWells: thanks so much! I'm happy you enjoyed it! Marge: thanks, m'friend...I appreciate your compliments! J: so, I guess that means I'm getting myself in deeper and deeper trouble with this rhyme thing then, huh?  ah well...thanks, girlie...glad you enjoyed! Liz: well, thank you! it's great to see you here, and I do truly appreciate your wonderful compliments! Cpat hair: thanks so much...I am happy you liked this! thanks for the compliments! sp  tried to write a letter |
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