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Sunshine
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0 posted 2001-08-28 10:32 PM


The First Times

in the vast of last’s
revere I remember
a long hall, your
feet were shod in
works’  attire
yet silently you
led the choir
to a room you
carried me
mother’s face
greeted we

baby’s birth we
honored in and lights
were bright, not so
grim as the next
time we trod the
hall, in memoriam I
remember all

the next first time
we led the dearth
for a loved man
would leave this earth
he waved high, then,
led outside
through a window
I peeked, then cried
grandfather, too
soon gone

a gentle man we
honored him
with lights too bright
now gone dim,
then on to the next
time I trod the hall,
in memoriam I
remember all

years had past, hardly
a visit, then
to the halls of walls
and who breathed in them
my birthing of child
did not matter
for I was not the
one who later
lost a dear one
to a death
a birth replaces
the beds of less

babies birth we
honor in and lights
are bright, not so
grim as the next
time we trod the halls,
in memoriam I
remember all

next first time
came too fast
a babe’s grandfather
gasped a last
down the hall
the families trod
a man was gone
he went with God

birth and life we
honored in lights
each time we trod
the hall,
in memoriam I
remember all

I’ve even watched
the walk of me
taken down in history,
the clip and clap
of one’s shoe
has been honored in
a show or two

to ER or a room of life
to see a love or
a wife
to see a neighbor
or a friend
these visits grow
and do not end

life and death we
honor all
they’re not so
grim when we
trod the hall,
in memoriam,
remember all



© Copyright 2001 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
Suetang
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1 posted 2001-08-28 10:45 PM


What a wonderful piece of writing you have penned here, so sad but so very lovely were your words.  Take care....Sue

Suetang

Saunni
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2 posted 2001-08-28 11:04 PM


Oh, so very sad, but such a cool way you wrote about it. Very creative  

Sauni @~~~>~~

The Sun Shines
Not On Us, But In Us
The River Flows Not Past,
But Through Us

Martie
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3 posted 2001-08-28 11:56 PM


Sunshine--this is such a wealth of loving feeling...thank you for sharing it.
rwood
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4 posted 2001-08-31 06:51 AM


This is a soft reality of life and death. Only you could have penned it so gently. We each take those walks. Some dreaded, and lonesome down the hall, some exhillerated with new life. Thank you for sharing this.

Sincerely,
Regina

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5 posted 2001-08-31 08:10 AM


very nicely done... construct follows subject and tone carried by all...

good stuff!!!!

Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 2001-08-31 08:17 AM


We have some serious sunshine this morning.
Well done. *L*

Rick
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7 posted 2001-08-31 09:02 AM


Dear Sunshine, what a wonderful peace of life, I felt the sadness which must have brought the words to you, but never the less enjoyed the life's journey.

Rick


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8 posted 2001-08-31 01:59 PM


I've found that the journeys never end. . . they just have a lot of rest stops. . .  

wonderfully done my friend. . . you have an understanding that few do. . .

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9 posted 2001-08-31 02:50 PM


May your's be a long hall and you and your loved ones be there for the long haul.
Charisma
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10 posted 2001-08-31 04:54 PM


Sad but oh so beautiful written.

Keeper for me!

((hugs))
Charisma

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11 posted 2001-08-31 05:28 PM


loved the way this read, Sunshine...

~Tier

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