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I Am Too Young to be So Old
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I Am Too Young to be So Old |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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I am Too Young to be so Old The black and white child of me falls from the memory book onto my counting of years. But, feeble is not written on my plan, for I feel like dancing and lifting heavy objects. What is that rush of air that quiets around me when I do? It frightens me, for you see I am too young to be so old. When did my children become almost middle aged? They are like a doctor holding the pulse of my moving vibrant youth and shaking their heads with the look that I understand as the turn around upside down time of changing places. Click, and touch the minute now in color, and add a bit of truth I tell my mirror, and in sudden realize the eyes have crinkled and blue veins streak the back of hand. There is a trick to getting older for as the body goes so do the eyes and the soft blur of youth is what I see. Feeble is not written on my plan, for I feel like dancing still and lifting heavy objects. I do both well. But, I hear the rush of air that quiets around me when I do and it frightens me, for you see I am too young to be so old. |
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DawnG 
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
I really like this Martie. I recently heard these same thoughts from my mother who just reached a landmark birthday. I may send this to her if that would be ok with you? Dawn |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Dawn--I would be pleased if you would send it to her...in fact you made me smile...thanks!  |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MagicalMartie~ 'There is a trick to getting older for as the body goes so do the eyes and the soft blur of youth is what I see.' Oh, Lordie ... THAT'S a touch of wisdom I'm gonna remember ! ! You've got me *smiling* BIG TIME ! My eye doctor is gonna LOVE THIS ~  I'm gonna convince him that I LIKE things in a 'blur' !  No new lens prescriptions for me ! ! Loving every youthful minute of this one~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I got news for ya darlin... there aint NOTHING wrong with those eyes... THOSE EYES dont miss a thing... those eyes have the vision of an eagle and the wisdom of an owl... and when your pen allows us to see the world thru your eyes...we grow wiser in your graces You got lots of dances in you still sweets and as for that heavy lifting... thats what tanned and tatooed "studlies" are for... and HEY....keeping a couple of those around... will keep ya feeling frisky LOL   |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Ahh, very gentle smile, now THIS, I relate to very well...very nicely done, Martie..very nice indeed..hmm, I wonder if you have to be my age to REALLY appreciate this |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie, It sort of sneaks up on you. I enjoyed. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
It frightens me too, Martie...sad sigh...I don't like this passage of life. Not at all. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
This is fantastic work, Martie! Especially liked: There is a trick to getting older for as the body goes so do the eyes and the soft blur of youth is what I see. But then, I loved all of it! Cor |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I was thinking something similar about my daughter the other day.... "When did my children become almost middle aged? They are like a doctor holding the pulse of my moving vibrant youth and shaking their heads with the look that I understand as the turn around upside down time of changing places. " You'll never be old in my mind Martie....I'll never tire of your eloquent pen! This is no exception!! |
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WRBreezin Member
since 2001-08-04
Posts 212 |
A mirror of words for some, I'm sure. Excellent work, and a joy to experience! Willie |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah the weight of the imperceptible spirit.... don't you know that I feel this as much as I know exactly where you are coming from.... this is a keeper....for the ages, and aged.... |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
Oh I like this...Yes we all age but...let us do it with grace and feel forever young!!!! -------------- |
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The Lonely Stranger Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 361Upstate, NY, USA |
A very descriptive piece of work ... perhaps a tad too descriptive for a 40 year old man who desperately doesn't want to get old. No one ever listened themselves into trouble. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
So that's why our eyes start to go...a blessing in disguise!! LOL This is great, Martie! I loved it! |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Me TOO!!! Very creatively done, love this. Sandra |
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