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shadow974 Senior Member
since 2001-06-21
Posts 636Michigan 
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Fantasies Fantasy is the sand of a desert mirage A gentle wind blows The sand dances to my pleasure Sand dancing on a high Reality sets in The sand stings the eye If I could escape but no My life is my own So I’ll make it true Fantasies come as a golden treasure Teasing me with tantalizing pleasure But when the day is done I will be myself I will realize that it was Just a distraction When I grow old And look back at my life I would like to do it Without a serrated knife To lie to yourself Is to be a fool’s fool I’d like to smile in the mirror And see my heart smiling back [This message has been edited by shadow974 (edited 08-27-2001).] |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Interesting way of looking at the temptations that exist all around us. Yet you are right, at the end of the day or any period of time, the reflection looking back at us should be one, that we can love. |
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DawnG 
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
This is a beautiful poem. Thank you for the read. Dawn |
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Trina Member
since 2001-06-28
Posts 97 |
Very beautiful. |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Wonderfully written and so very much enjoyed. Take care......Sue Suetang |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I'm not sure if you are talking of fantasy or temptations...James |
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shadow974 Senior Member
since 2001-06-21
Posts 636Michigan |
I'm mainly talking about fantasies but they could someday become temptations that would then be very strong. Thanks for the comment James. Throw your heart out in front of you |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
*wow* I like this one a lot. well said!! Charisma |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I'm sure that it will. . . I like this, I like the form that you've used here. . . gives it that "dreamy" quality that shows in the words that you've used. . . great job. . .  ----------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
I especially love the part about not looking back with a serrated knife. Great poetry |
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Enotneicna Member
since 1999-06-06
Posts 340Oakland, Or, USA |
shadow......wonderful.....I enjoyed this much. Scent of Calm To breathe, To find release from all things both good and bad. Breathe deep the sweetness of clarity, The aroma of what it means, To truly know the person Behind the face looking back From your reflection. The scent of blissful calm deep within those eyes. The peace of spirit, mind and soul. After which serenity of this outer shell comes, Just comes. Breathe deep. Enotneicna SLR 1999 Many blessings Always Eno Words are my medicine. Read and live and love and heal! [This message has been edited by Enotneicna (edited 08-29-2001).] |
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shadow974 Senior Member
since 2001-06-21
Posts 636Michigan |
Thank you Lost Dreamer, It seems so easy to just fall over the edge, yet for me there is to high of a price to pay, inside. Thank you Dawn, I'm glad you enjoyed. Thank you Trina for the nice comment and the read. Thanks Sue, for the nice comments. I'm glad you enjoyed. Thank you Charisma. Thank you Sven for the vote of confidence. I'm pleased that you enjoyed. Thanks Tracey, I really want to keep the peace. Eno, I love your poem, thank you. Throw your heart out in front of you And run out to catch it. ARAB PROVERB [This message has been edited by shadow974 (edited 08-29-2001).] |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
I'm slow, but glad I didn't miss this one. The greatest thing IS to look in that mirror, and really like what you see. For everything you are. Sand and all! I loved this! Sincerely, Regina |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Says a lot, doesn't it? The serrated knife was genius, I must say.. Sandra |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Shadow974, our fantasies will always be there, they are our hopes and dreams which get us through this life we live. Our mirror reflect our image, one we must grow to like and accept. The mirrored image is not the true person, for we all come from within to greet the day and its people. I enjoyed the read, thank you. Rick |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
We need our little escapes, our daydreams, our fantasies. The trick is not to stay there full time. As long as you can maintain the gaze of the man in the mirror you're alright. Great poem. |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Some excellent realizations and descriptions, Dan: Reality sets in The sand stings the eye When I grow old And look back at my life I would like to do it Without a serrated knife I’d like to smile in the mirror And see my heart smiling back Enjoyed this read -- thank you. -MVS "It's all in the details -- the Big Picture always takes care of itself." |
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