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Twenty or Less...#33 |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Emptiness Consumes Confusion Silence Reveals My soul's Shattering Allowing Her eyes Her lips Her face Her love To ev a p o r a t e A w a y (Copyright 2001 by: MARK V SHELDON) "It's all in the details -- the Big Picture always takes care of itself." -MVS [This message has been edited by MARK V SHELDON (edited 08-24-2001).] |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
I like this alot, yanno?  Its sad, but I love the way you wrote it. |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Thank you, Jennifer -- it's a first for me in terms of the spaces/spacing really being as important as the words... -MVS "It's all in the details -- the Big Picture always takes care of itself." |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Love your presentation and your words. ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
MArk, this sounds like a loss poem, but it isn't really. I like the spacing, it does add feeling to it somehow. Sandra |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
It reads like a Hichcock, Mark, very well done..gentle smile |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Nancy -- thank you... sometimes it's all in the "presentation"... Sandra, it is actually, but as you notice, at the same time, it is also a poem of "letting go"... Logan, now there's a perspective I hadn't considered! Interesting, through such eyes... -MVS "It's all in the details -- the Big Picture always takes care of itself." |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Yes, I agree with Logan. It's very Vertigo. Except he couldn't let go. But I believe his eloquence and confusion was the beginning. The form was very fitting indeed. Great job. Sincerely, Regina |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
VERY COOL!! creative and clever write Mark... the format and presentation gave the succinct emote a cryptic haunted feel to it. way cool...and good to see your name here again  jm Feels like Im dancin with truth and wisdom |
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shadow974 Senior Member
since 2001-06-21
Posts 636Michigan |
Creative way to move beyond the past Mark. Well done Throw your heart out in front of you |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Thanks, Regina... perhaps "The Lady Vanishes" would be even more appropriate...? JM, thank you very much -- it's nice to be back, if even for a few moments... Dan, it's all about striving to be creative, no? -MVS "It's all in the details -- the Big Picture always takes care of itself." |
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