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In The Distance |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
~In The Distance~ There is distance in the space between us ... Now feeling chained by what used to set us free Doubt and discontent only add to the misery And I can't see you anymore ... Love's light slowly fades ... into the distance There are lies in the space between us Trust and faith have passed us by ... To the point we cant even look each other in the eye I don't think I believe in love anymore ... Could it be out there for me ... somewhere in the distance There is anger in the space between us Compromise has lost its grace Resentment grows and takes its place There is a rage burning deep inside of me ... From its hold ... I need to find distance There is pain in the space between us Old wounds and old scars ... forever bleed Did we mistake love for an aching need I need release from this agony ... Healing is somewhere ... in the distance There is loss in the space between us Patience and passion lost to living a lie Hearts break ... dreams fade ... then die There has already been so much taken ... And still my past follows me ... into the distance There is emptiness in the space between us In my heart there's just vacancy Loneliness keeps me constant company With nothing left to hold us here ... It's safe to say ... we wont go the distance There is silence in the space between us The words to save this ... just cant be found Listen close ... as love leaves ... it makes no sound And now I can hear someone else calling to me ... Perhaps there is something more ... off in the distance Janet Marie  *repost at the request of a friend ... thank you for remembering this one. May you find your dreams in the distance. *with some changes/rewrites from original post in open 8 Feels like Im dancin with truth and wisdom Precious rhythm you are my guide These days are sacred, my heart is humble Oh warrior show me thy light [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 08-23-2001).] |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
And look how far you have come through the distance, to be able to repost, without the hurt... well done, Moth-lady.... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
in the distance lies many things... this poem is lovely...sad recognition of the distance time and lack of attention to a relationship can create... very well done... very well done indeed. |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet |
Wow....I'm so glad you reposted this. I needed to read it as well...beautiful, just beautiful... Hugs, ~Krista |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
That road wouldn't be calling you to N.O.? WOULD IT???  I would just love to see what you come up with after drinking raspberry tea brewed with Mardi Gras water!!!Hugs you..haven't forgotten ya..just waking up here...I slept forever yesterday and feel like Rip Van Winkle...sigh. And this poem? Just a few of the words that I understood too well. As YOU KNOW...but? Methinks a vacation would help tremendously!!! Winkie wink!  |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Sure glad you reposted this. Thank you  Homepage : http://members.home.net/excalibur2501/interloper.htm |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautifully done....loved it! ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
JanetMarie~ I was immediately sent thumbing through Rod McKuen's 'Come To Me In Silence' ... And under his 'A Fist Full Of Snow' was this thought - Have we been apart so long that there's no getting back ? Was there a curve we didn't go around together, one embankment one of us did not foresee ? Worse - has someone else been hiking down your highway ?' How poignant your write~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Sometimes space and distance helps us breathe and see our real need. Other times it becomes a place of no return. Good poem. I see meaning in seeking relief, yet needing truth. Deb |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
JM this reminded me of a very painful divorce I had, and a friend bought the book Marge spoke of, Rod McKuen's 'Come To Me In Silence' so I would get to the place of anger then forgiveness, lady...you covered every single emotion going in that poem, and I commend you for a fantastic piece of poetry - never mind that it stuck a nerve with me - by the way, consider yourself hugged! ~*Homepage*~ http://www.mysteria-poetry.cityslide.com/contents/contents.cfm/722155 |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
There is distance in the space between us ... Now feeling chained by what used to set us free Doubt and discontent only add to the misery And I can't see you anymore ... Love's light slowly fades ... into the distance I hope I never have to feel this way..you have covered all areas of emotions... beautifully written, JanetMarie ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Glad this is a repost and not a fresh wound. Geez I loath liars. Good heartfelt write. "Oh what a tangled web we weave when first we practice to decieve" |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
In the distance....*sigh* what I wouldn't give for a tank full of gas, a fresh MB20 cd, a stary night and an open road...yeppers baby....in the distance. Love the way you weave baby!! No one does it like you!!! |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Nope, J...no fave lines here...the entire poem is captivating in its very well-expressed emotion...but, I wouldn't expect anything less from a JM post, repost or not...great write, m'friend!  k  tried to write a letter |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
and butterflies fly free...very gentle smile |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
JM thanks for reposting, this is absolutely beautiful, sometimes distance is needed. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Janet Marie--Sometimes in the distance, is where we see most clear...and there is always love waiting, it is in you. |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
We can grow together... or we can grow apart... Either way, grow we must - and live life - You've captured it well, JM.. |
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illusion Member
since 2001-06-19
Posts 296 |
Listen close ... as love leaves ... it makes no sound This poem is filled with beauty and sadness and very well written - this line is particularly wrenching in its truth. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
This is absolutely breath taking....and sometimes closeness is found in distance. Have missed your writing my friend |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, I agree with Nan and would like to add, there is always something in the distance. Like Winkiewinkie me. |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
I can feel the tumbleweeds rolling down the lonely highway of your poem, snagging sensitive pockets of emotion and vulnerabilities... I find that distance tends to be a better thing when it is observed in the rear view mirror rather than the windshield... most of the time... A haunting write, JM. Thanks for the re-post. -MVS "It's all in the details -- the Big Picture always takes care of itself." |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Thank you ALL for your kind replies and for the advice and compassion. Thank you to my fellow poet pal who asked for this one to be reposted, there is no greater compliment than to have someone say they have never forgotten the effect a poem had on them and that it stayed with them...... that is the power and gift of poetry. thank you to Poetry Land. my love to all jm |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
There is loss in the space between us Patience and passion lost to living a lie Hearts break ... dreams fade ... then die There has already been so much taken ... And still my past follows me ... into the distance When going back is impossible, staying put unrealistic, moving on...beyond comprehension. You've written it all here. Glad you reposted this. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
What's this???????? I do believe that "In The Distance", I hear the thunder of a thousand kicking up the dust on the plains of yesterday. Maybe if you LISTEN real intently you can make out the sound of just one hoof trodding the parched soil. Yeppers...........I do believe that it is getting closer. (ride the white buffalo) You always did know how to pen the emotions and the thoughts in poetic grace and beauty didn't you? I am glad you reposted and thank you to the one who asked for this to come about again. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Oh my....what a beautiful write...I think many can relate at these or some of these feelings...thank you for the repost. Charisma |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"and now I can hear someone else calling to me." Seems like when a relationship is going well we don't hear these other voices and when it starts to deteriorate we hope we will hear another voice...James |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
JanetMarie, this is such a great poem. I think we've all been there, somehow, someway Thank you 'person' who asked for this repost and thank you JM for reposting it. Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
Wow! Wow! Wow! This is a sad but beautiful write.... <<<<< Clapping>>>>>> |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
a wedge does so increase the distance, continually...a perfect rendition of what happens once it's begun I love the hope that is also held in this poem that perhaps, somewhere in the distance, love will find a home |
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Gwendrina Junior Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 33 |
There is pain in the space between us Old wounds and old scars ... forever bleed Did we mistake love for an aching need I need release from this agony ... Healing is somewhere ... in the distance Hi Janet Marie This is poetry that touches reality as well as the reader's heart and spirit with powerful clarity and feeling. You have captured the essence of two estranged beings with expertise and artistic sensitivity. I can only marvel at your perception. It's a topic I think so many of us can relate to. thank you Wendy |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Oh Janet! How you have captured those feelings. It seems that when everything is going well love gets taken for granted....but...when that distance comes along, wow! it just seems to kill everything that's alive. I'm sure I remember this from before.....However, I'm so glad you reposted it is a work of art when it comes to expressing those empty feelings...... excellent!! My dear poet pet! Reminds me of this one I wrote that describes the reasons why these things can happen''' Miss the times when we were younger and the love we did invest and of all the love I kicked around I thought ours was the best. But I was never there for you and it drew us far from close. I was in sales and tellin tales and drinkin patron's toasts. I showed no favor for your choice and you spent your time alone, now you're gone and time moves on I know I did you wrong. Chorus: All the good times I could find took me far away from you and left you trapped inside while I was seeking dues. Now my lonely heart and mind roam round this empty soul and the lesson lingers overtime and I'm wishin you were home. I call you in the early morning to draw the past to mind. A brave new me, a change complete, I offer to your mind. You talk to me and my heart flips, I beg you back again. A concerned woman you see me and I can't seem to win. It's plain and simple who's to fault and your worries shake me off but you turn heartache into hoping and I'm glad to hear you talk. Chorus rep: Through all the years you held my name and stated your place with style and in the stress you'd address the absence of my smile. But your hopes went sadly thin I destroyed your cause. I didn't see your needs then I sought my own applause. Your love finally turned to ice it took a long long time. Now I live with the sacrifice of pushing you from my mind. Bridge: I remember our first home a simple captured thrill. and our driven dreams where the future gleams with the needs that all must fill and the late nights laying back talking after love and the fire there that burnt the air was the flame of all first loves. Now I've turned to other means you say your heart wont mend. So I push on into somewhere and I call you now and then. But when it's very late at night and I turn to share your soul. I cry softly to myself while another plays your role. So the good times ruined my time and I know I'm still alone beneath the scars I need your heart and I'm wishin you were home. Have a nice day and write on my dear poet lady!! |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
You know, I remember the first time you posted this. It is so strong, and emotional, and just so you, I love it. You have so many amazing poems, they all need another go round every once in a while. Glad you reposted this one. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Thank you all for so many wonderful replies to this oldie....Im overwhelmed by these responses. Ethome thank you sharing that beautiful song of yours. Love and respect to poetry land. THANK YOU jm |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I forgot to save this jewell from the heart of poetry! |
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