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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
She stood swaying Arms folded under breast Trying to hold in the heart That wanted to fall to the floor Breaking into shards of misery. Bent by the winds of life’s storms With roots planted in a rich lifetime Of toil and experience, she held firmly To the bedrock of faith and family Losing another child to death’s arms All these many years after the first Unleashed grey black clouds of grief Roiling through her soul She stood swaying Arms folded under her breast Raining tears onto cheeks that Had tenderly hugged all her children As thundering pain echoed Through memories canyons Another storm… In a tempestuous life To be weathered and To survive… |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
All of the women here at Passions will in some way relate to this, I promise... Well done Sir! |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
I like this, a good word painting showing the soul of the character. Gloom |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
'She stood swaying Arms folded under breast Trying to hold in the heart That wanted to fall to the floor Breaking into shards of misery.' My heart is in my throat with picturesque recall of my mother when we lost my brother~ 'As thundering pain echoed Through memories canyons' She existed until God took her home to be with him again~ |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Perfect! May I copy and share, it may prove a catalyst to some. |
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2dalimit Member Elite
since 2000-02-08
Posts 2228Mississippi coast |
You have penned a great one. Such emotion. Melton |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Capt. Hair....your touch endears, as always. Beautifully said. Bob |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Not supposed to be that way, the young preceeding us in death. Worst case scenario for any parent and pain which is as constant as the next breath. Takes a particularly strong individual to stand up to it and not pray for their own end. Powerful stuff. |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet |
 What a sad write Ron....but so beautifully penned. You have captured the emotions well.Take care, ~Krista "Poetry and Hums aren't things which you get, they're things which get you. And all you can do is to go where they can find you." ~Winnie the Pooh [This message has been edited by SmittenKitten (edited 08-31-2001).] |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Amazing, Ron. -MVS "It's all in the details -- the Big Picture always takes care of itself." |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Excellent writing...impressive! Michael Michael Auguste~ |
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citizenx Member
since 2001-07-31
Posts 189motorcade |
She stood swaying Arms folded under her breast Raining tears onto cheeks that Had tenderly hugged all her children As thundering pain echoed Through memories canyons Another storm… In a tempestuous life To be weathered and To survive… ========== so achingly beautiful. "the blizzard of the world has crossed the threshold and it has overturned |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
tears are spilling here.. can't even handle the thought Your words painted well the pain..... |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
I remember this one well... good to read it again... excellent! ~Tier |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Capt--What a vivid picture of grief. It is so real that I can see the tears. |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Cpat, fantastic, ahh even more so...gentle smile |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
This is such and emotional read...wonderfully written...you really touched me thank you |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I felt this then, and I feel it again now. I want to tell you how well done this is but how can I tell you the kind of pain of which you speak is a good thing? I will say, you captured it all too well. ~*If you can't say anything nice about someone, don't say anything at all*~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
God Ron!....... heaven forbid the feelings that accompany being predeceased by an offspring. I can't even imagine it! That's not the way life is supposed to go! This is very well done and I appreciate the work! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
This is a masterly penned write, my friend, Ron. Touching! I am so glad that I was guided towards this one... Regards, Sudhir |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
BRAVO, Ron! 1derful my friend  |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Dear C, Once again you have penned with heartquill. Poignant and rendered with care. Thank you for sharing this with us. Sincerely, Regina |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
This reminded me of my grandmother. She lived to suffer the death of several of her sons and even a grandchild. It seems the most unnatural of tragedies. |
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