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Undine |
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Gwendrina Junior Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 33 |
Her demeanor was poised with a haunting sadness, an indecisive movement in her step which emulated the drizzling rain around her… Anais Nin  Against the courtyard trees and barricading stone a girl slants --- emulating rain. Dolphin-sleek in her gray coat she walks into the spray of leaves rising from the oceanic mist of willows. Her hair infiltrates the wind with silvery flares of light and eyes decode the silent masque of shadows passing before her. First, phantoms of memory come -- their whispers of neglected love abrade her voice like sand within a shell of silence spiraled white. Then harried strangers rushing across campus whirl umbrellas bright as the fins of Siamese Fighting fish. Blue, red, gold, beautiful shades of nylon swim upstream against the storm's current like her dreams against an on-going past. Tears of salt and iron burst rinsing down the clouded silt of her mind. Sunlight spawns and eyes perceive a clearer path; the fog --left simmering over a quiet, spring sea. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
lovely imagery..and a very nice write... I enjoyed a great deal... indeed a great deal. |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
What my friend said, and then some! |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Fabulous Gwendrina! Welcome! And what an awe inspiring write. The undrearyness of this rain brought such clear images. I love the sea effect in this. Very wonderful. Much Praise! Sincerely Regina |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
it's like a video painting, you've described the scene so vividly Wow! First of yours I've read, I think. I'm not good with names though, so I hope I'm right. Well done! Enjoyed the view and the sensations of the read. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
GwenDrina~ Welcome to Passions ! 'Against the courtyard trees and barricading stone a girl slants --- emulating rain.' This is sheer beauty of thought~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Gwendrina Junior Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 33 |
Hi Everyone, THANK YOU ALL FOR SUCH KIND WORDS!!! I truly appreciate your warm welcome and offering of such insightful and gracious comments regarding my poem "Undine". Wendy |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
Very nice indeed.... |
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