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Gwendrina
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since 2001-08-21
Posts 33


0 posted 2001-08-21 04:57 PM


To him  
I am a bone-thin syllable
wife, nothing else.

I wait to hear
loving, patient, or beautiful
precede the role

but he saves those sweet endearments
for the boat,
not as words but as ways
of handling her.

he loves the wooden bow
sliding pelvis-smooth
in legs of wind
that carry her along
the river’s course .

He takes her out
several times a week
and sleeps in a lap
cushioned with velour
scented with cedar.

Moonlight falls
over the water
and she bathes
in cool silver
and the shadow of trees
rippling beneath her body

in the same way
my hair
used to ripple beneath his.

I can still see David’s eyes
shining under crescent lids
drawing my love
into a smile he touched
with fingers blistered

from working in the garden
building  a  summerhouse
out of antique iron
and slate tiles.

He made a place for us
then retreated
to one of  his own.
.
These  summer evenings
I sit in the yard
wearing twilight
like a widow’s veil,

constantly asking
                why.


© Copyright 2001 Gwendrina - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
1 posted 2001-08-21 05:01 PM



Gwen, with writing like this, you will gather a following, and quickly!  Welcome to Passions!

Please, check your e-mail for a special greeting!

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




Sven
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2 posted 2001-08-21 05:18 PM


I must concur with Sunshine. . . this is a tale well told. . . one that too many people can relate to. . .

it's pure, heartfelt, and has all the pain of a woman who's been replaced. . . albeit not with a mistress of flesh and blood, but with one of wood and metal. . .

welcome. . . wonderfully done. . .  

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

3 posted 2001-08-21 08:07 PM


I can still see David’s eyes
shining under crescent lids
drawing my love
into a smile he touched
with fingers blistered

from working in the garden
building  a  summerhouse
out of antique iron
and slate tiles.

He made a place for us
then retreated
to one of  his own.
.
These  summer evenings
I sit in the yard
wearing twilight
like a widow’s veil,
===========================
oh my this is achingly beautiful,
excellent writing here...the imagery is superbly done as is the express of the emotion.
Welcome to Poetry Land, its so nice to have you here...and yes...I too look forward to more of your work.
jm

Feels like Im dancin with truth and wisdom
Precious rhythm you are my guide
These days are sacred, my heart is humble
Oh warrior show me thy light

VAS
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450
Oregon
4 posted 2001-08-21 08:17 PM


Wow!!! What a magnificent first post!  I ache for the woman in this tale and hope it is only a tale, but know that it does occur all too much. How does one compete with inanimate objects that seem to be alive to the dreamer?

Welcome!  I truly enjoyed reading this, fantastic piece.

BRAVO
RMW
Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424

5 posted 2001-08-21 08:22 PM


Gwen....ouch!

Sailing

Come bend a comma on the wind,
And in the pause
Begin again
That passage youth once longed to make.
Tack!
Come about!
There are no ruts here on the lake.

RMW   PS ...but your poem was great.

shadow974
Senior Member
since 2001-06-21
Posts 636
Michigan
6 posted 2001-08-21 08:34 PM


Great poem and welcome to passions!

Throw your heart out in front of you
And run out to catch it.
ARAB PROVERB

snowpants
Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061
KS
7 posted 2001-08-21 10:07 PM


Achingly beautiful expressions, Gwendrina!  Welcome to Passions...great write!

sp  

tried to write a letter
to tell you how I feel,
but all I kept on writing
was slipping on the tears from the day...

SmittenKitten
Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131
where the sky and horizon meet
8 posted 2001-08-21 10:17 PM


Wow...can't wait to read more!
Welcome to Passions  
~Krista  

Gwendrina
Junior Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 33

9 posted 2001-08-22 12:28 PM


Hello Everyone,

Just wanted to say thank you all so much for the gracious welcome to "Passions" and for
the wonderful comments and insight you have offered on my first poem, here. I am touched by your kindness!!!

thank you
Wendy

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