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SmittenKitten
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since 2001-06-20

Posts 1131
where the sky and horizon meet

0 posted 2001-08-20 07:23 AM

Eyes

The
windows to our souls.
Our pain trickles from them in
symmetrical  drops - they give away what
we try to hold deep inside - you can't hide the
emotions from their powerful openings
smiles, laughs, and tears, all
true emotion, will
be displayed.

Kit McCallum

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since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

1 posted 2001-08-20 07:37 AM

Ah, it's all in the eyes indeed SmittenKitten ... a lovely shape to compliment these sentiments, nicely done!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

2 posted 2001-08-20 08:25 AM

SmittenKitten~

Girlie girl ... just look at you ! ! !
I'm so proud of you !
I'm grinning from eyeball to eyeball.
Love it !
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

3 posted 2001-08-20 09:14 AM

nicely done... a pleasure as usual...

quite creative in both words and shape...

Decaflame
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since 2001-05-11

Posts 1635

4 posted 2001-08-20 09:27 AM

These are fun to do, and I know they are NOT easy! Well done!

ethome
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since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

5 posted 2001-08-20 09:29 AM

Clever presentation! The content is very well done also!

John Yaws
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since 1999-10-09

Posts 860
Texas

6 posted 2001-08-20 12:02 PM

Excellent! What a novel comcept! the writing was as imaginative as the design.

jellybeans
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since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

7 posted 2001-08-20 12:15 PM

very nice...and yep I am a perfect example, you can see right though to my soul...through my eyes.....can't hide a thing....sigh

VAS
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since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

8 posted 2001-08-20 12:21 PM

your artistic prowess is showing,
not to mention your ganas to do your very best at whatever your endeavor...delightful in both realms of art here

Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

9 posted 2001-08-20 12:41 PM

SmittenKitten~

I have always loved shape poems!

Very clever and well expressed!~

Take care,
Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

Sven

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since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

10 posted 2001-08-20 01:31 PM

superbly done SK. . . and well written. . . great job. . . (:

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Interloper

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since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

11 posted 2001-08-20 02:54 PM

I love your blue eye(s), SK

Well done indeed!

http://members.home.net/excalibur2501/interloper.htm

Mark Bohannan
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since 2000-06-21

Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song

12 posted 2001-08-20 07:06 PM

They can be addicting can't they??? So nice to see you playing with the shapes and including such nice poetry within them. Wonderful indeed.

Oh, btw ... "cowboy" simply cause I AM!!!

shadow974
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since 2001-06-21

Posts 636
Michigan

13 posted 2001-08-20 07:11 PM

Very nice and what the poem says is oh so true.

Throw your heart out in front of you
And run out to catch it.
ARAB PROVERB

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

14 posted 2001-08-20 08:40 PM

very cool SK..
looks perfect and reads perfect!!
I think your hooked

well done.
jm

rwood
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since 2000-02-29

Posts 3793
Tennessee

15 posted 2001-08-20 09:04 PM

Wow! Very cool! I really like this concept, and the poem is wonderful. It (looks) like it would be tough to do. I will just read in awe of your talent. (I'm afraid mine would look like an abstract mess, and my words would slide off the page!) Bravo!

Sincerely,
Regina

SmittenKitten
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since 2001-06-20

Posts 1131
where the sky and horizon meet

16 posted 2001-08-21 12:46 PM

Kit ~ I love eyes

you can tell a person's true beauty through them.

Marge ~ hehehe

thank you so much for introducing me to them! They're *so* much fun! *hugs*

Cpat ~ thank you

it's fun to try and match them!

ethome ~ thanks a bunch

gunslinger ~ I got the concept from Marge

it's a challenge to try and get the form and words to compliment each other but well worth the effort!

jellybeans ~ the saying is "she wears her heart on her sleeve" but I think it's more to do with eyes myself!

let your emotions shine through, it's a good thing!

VAS ~ wow, what a beautiful compliment. Thank you so much!

I can only hope to be as talented as yourself someday.

Melissa ~ Thanks

I love them now too!

Sven ~ thanks!

have I told you how much I love your signature??

Interloper ~ hehe, why thank you

mine are actually green...although my mom is still convinced they're as blue as the day I was born!

Mark ~ YES! Very

thanks for reading and encouraging my addiction, Cowboy

Shadow974 ~ thank you

Janet Marie ~ yes, I think so too! And it's *all* Marge's fault!

I'm having so much fun though. Thanks for being here to enjoy it with me!

rwood ~ hehe, it's really not as hard as it looks! It just takes patience, which is the real challenge!

I believe you would be a success at these

Thank you all for your kind words! Really made my day

Hugs to all!

Snow

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since 2000-10-16

Posts 1170
desert flower looking for rain

17 posted 2001-08-22 04:28 PM

You've done very well, in what you have written and how you presented it. Concrete poetry (this style) is not easy at all and you've done an excellent job.

Snow

"Trace my body with your words
and in doing so, you touch my heart"
Snow

vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

18 posted 2001-08-27 01:29 AM

SmittenKitten-
   Wow!  You're doing a wonderful job
   on these shape poems!
   Aren't they fun?!
   Can't wait to see what you come up
   with next..

   hugs,
   ~vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes

ramrog
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since 2001-08-22

Posts 50

19 posted 2001-08-27 01:51 AM

coooool, I like that...

SmittenKitten
Senior Member

since 2001-06-20

Posts 1131
where the sky and horizon meet

20 posted 2001-08-27 10:51 AM

Snow~ it is certainly a challenge

but a fun challenge! You should see some of the awesome shape poems they come up with in Open #10. Janet Marie suggested I check them out and man am I humbly amazed! I can only aspire to be that talented

Hey, I really like your signature..very poetic.

Vicky~ hehe, well you're bad! Now you've got my fingers itching to try some more

But, I must wait for my muse to catch the feeling as well!

Ramrog~ hehe, your icon is hilarious

thanks for stopping by!

Hugs to all of you!

[This message has been edited by SmittenKitten (edited 08-27-2001).]

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