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Logan
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0 posted 2001-08-19 09:13 AM


The dance of life we slowly weave
Back and forth over natures floor
Music strums into our ears
A melody always so constantly
Sometimes a slow dance holding tight
Then a reel with fingers briefly touch

A sea of faces moving round
Then why alone seems the spirit cry
Are we really free in our quests
Or does it seem the strings so pull
With the knee jerking motion of the puppet true
Skipping along but not free

Do batteries move until run down
Or a wind up motion till spring too tight
With a frantic skipping for amusements sake
Cut the strings, battery shed, key abandoned
Reach out, touch with fingertip to the stars
Soar away on wings of free


© Copyright 2001 Logan - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
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1 posted 2001-08-19 09:21 AM



This certainly soars on wings of free...this is beautiful Logan, quiet, calm, peaceful...

wonderful...

Janet Marie
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2 posted 2001-08-19 09:24 AM


A melody always so constantly
Sometimes a slow dance holding tight
Then a reel with fingers briefly touch
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Reach out, touch with fingertip to the stars
Soar away on wings of free
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Logan your free verse are as wisdom enriched as are your rhymes...
this is sooo lovely.
very very nice poet sir...

Feels like Im dancin with truth and wisdom
Precious rhythm you are my guide
These days are sacred, my heart is humble
Oh warrior show me thy light

Lone Wolf
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3 posted 2001-08-19 09:53 AM


This, my gentle friend, soars.  Lovely write filled with sage advice.  

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

poetsguild
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4 posted 2001-08-19 09:54 AM


Wonderful rhythm achieved
a wise message delivered.

Good one, Logan.

Kit McCallum
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5 posted 2001-08-19 10:34 AM


Oh it does feel like this Logan, it does. You've captured and put to a wonderful flow, so many sentiments I relate so closely to. Beautifully written, a great deal to ponder here ... much enjoyed!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

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6 posted 2001-08-19 11:00 AM


Trying so very hard to let myself fly free, Logan. You put this perfectly. Such a challenge to get to be able to live your honest life.
Sandra

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7 posted 2001-08-19 03:10 PM


Now you know I do with "little feathers", still waiting for the big ones.  I refuse to be chained to conformity every again, ever!  I loved this and if even a handful listen you have hit your mark Logan (hugs)

If you have but one true friend when you die you were truly blessed
   ~* Mysteria *~

shadow974
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8 posted 2001-08-19 03:17 PM


This is just full of wisdom. Logan you teach with each stroke of your pen.

Throw your heart out in front of you
And run out to catch it.

[This message has been edited by shadow974 (edited 08-21-2001).]

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9 posted 2001-08-20 05:14 AM


Logan~

'Sometimes a slow dance holding tight
Then a reel with fingers briefly touch'


What lovely teachings~
Thank you, learned one~
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
                                   noles1@totcon.com            

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10 posted 2001-08-20 06:29 AM


Sometimes it takes an anchored string
for a kite to soar as free...

with smiles, Logan...

Nan
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11 posted 2001-08-20 08:51 AM


What better place to be - than on the wings of free.. Nicely done, Logan
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Deep in the heart
12 posted 2001-08-20 05:07 PM


You said it!  What a finale!  Well done!
Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
13 posted 2001-08-20 07:02 PM


Works for me.  Nice to see such a masterfully done piece of free-verse and then find a wonderful message in it that I know to be true.  Excellent penning.
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