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Victoria

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since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

0 posted 2001-08-16 02:35 PM

Play me like a violin in the dark of night
listen to woodwinds whispering our song
a melody of promises, drifting out to bay
pluck me like a harp until the light of dawn
round and round upon my music box
the chorus within your eyes I am drawn
ivory keys in the sky play a galaxy
a baton of shooting stars lead the way
sighs are like thunder, cymbals in the night
our hearts beat softly a flower drum song
bathing in a symphony of stolen love
black tuxedos upon the stage of romance
join me upon the brass of my carousel
Join me for our finale, our last dance.

Every child is an artist. The challenge is to remain an artist once he grows up.

Pablo Picasso

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

1 posted 2001-08-16 02:43 PM

quite a tune you have composed here..and the images quite clear... a symphonic encounter

I enjoyed

WRBreezin
Member

since 2001-08-04

Posts 212

2 posted 2001-08-16 03:41 PM

sighs are like thunder, cymbals in the night
our hearts beat softly a flower drum song

I caught a glimpse of a brush in a drummer's hand slow fanning across his cymbal...soft, sensual, and delightful.

Willie

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

3 posted 2001-08-16 03:45 PM

Victoria this is so lovely...
the imagery is done with ethereal grace.
beautiful romantic inspire.
nice to see your name here again

jm

Feels like Im dancin with truth and wisdom
Precious rhythm you are my guide
These days are sacred, my heart is humble
Oh warrior show me thy light

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

4 posted 2001-08-16 06:43 PM

Victoria~
This is FANTASTIC ! !
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

5 posted 2001-08-16 07:28 PM

This is lovely, as always. I wish I was in the middle of that poem somewhere..

Sandra

I took a walk around the world to ease my troubled mind. I left my body lying somewhere in the sands of time (3 Doors Down)

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

6 posted 2001-08-16 10:04 PM

Thank you all very much..appreciate all of your sweet comments hugs to all

~Victoria~

A Whisper's Caress
Senior Member

since 2000-11-03

Posts 791
on the horizon of a fairytale

7 posted 2001-08-17 10:00 PM

simply lovely.....

poetsguild
Member

since 2001-08-12

Posts 85
Florida

8 posted 2001-08-17 10:04 PM

Play me like a violin in the dark of night
listen to woodwinds whispering our song

ahhhhh, the music of l'amour

beautifully sung

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

9 posted 2001-08-18 04:23 AM

I like the thoughts of this...James

MoonShadow
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since 2001-08-02

Posts 943
Dark side of the Moon.

10 posted 2001-08-18 05:07 AM

Great use of metaphore and simile to create a lovely, vivid picture in the mind. A virtual symphony of imagery.

RSWells
Member Elite

since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

11 posted 2001-08-18 08:05 AM

Seems the orchestra's tuned and simply awaits a worthy conducter. Enjoyed.

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

12 posted 2001-08-18 05:27 PM

"pluck me like a harp. . . "

that's my favorite line Victoria. . . it just is. . .

this is a very wonderful poem. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

13 posted 2001-08-18 07:58 PM

This is wonderful! You have some great lines and images throughout this gem

Into my library this goes~

Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

14 posted 2001-08-18 08:26 PM

Oooooh...how beautiful!! Enjoyed it ever so much!!

shadow974
Senior Member

since 2001-06-21

Posts 636
Michigan

15 posted 2001-08-18 08:38 PM

You have written a beautiful poem full imagery and romance.

Throw your heart out in front of you
And run out to catch it.

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

16 posted 2001-08-18 09:00 PM

thank you all very much...i appreciate your lovely comments..glad you enjoyed

~Victoria~

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