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Decaflame
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since 2001-05-11
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0 posted 2001-08-15 12:01 PM


Look Out…

it is time to
clean it out, this
soul of mine,
it needs a good
hang on the
laundry line,
a brisk broom
of sweep and
whap, across
the loom of
my warp…

it requires a
washing for
neglect
has sat in its
introspect, it
came out a little
dingier, true,
only as it found
the clues that
were always there
behind mirror’s
glare,
as in common
form I could not
stare…

perhaps drycleaning
a chemicals’
demise of grit and
grime and all
reprise, a sound
tumble in the vat,
perhaps some
steam clean
is where it’s at…

this soul needs
a wiping down of
stain, to fool the
birds into their flight
of windows so clean
they think they
can get to the other
side, pulling up
sharp as they
near and see slight
reflection in
this windowless
clear

yes, I agree, it’s
time to shake the
shimmy and lighten
up the dimly
lit resources of
my review,
so don’t stand too
close, as I might
clean you,
too…


© Copyright 2001 Decaflame - All Rights Reserved
Cpat Hair
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1 posted 2001-08-15 12:04 PM


(chuckling) Fall cleaning time..shake out the dust of dry days and prepare for the coming coolness...

nicely written... and probably many of us could use some cleaning ourselves..



illusion
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2 posted 2001-08-15 12:06 PM


I probably need it.   Very well written.  
RMW
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3 posted 2001-08-15 01:39 PM


Warrants a theological critique...smiling...but that would not go here. Otherwise, super! Bob
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4 posted 2001-08-15 01:55 PM


We all need a gentle cleansing of the soul once in a while, clean windows really do help.  This was great writing Decaflame.

If you have but one true friend when you die you were truly blessed
   ~* Mysteria *~

citizenx
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since 2001-07-31
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motorcade
5 posted 2001-08-16 02:21 PM


I could with a bit of springing there myself.
Really enjoyed this, clever and subtle.  
I liked this one alot

shadows flicker sweet end tame
dancing like crazy mourners" magazine


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6 posted 2001-08-17 02:32 AM


DecaFlame~

'it’s
time to shake the
shimmy and lighten
up'


This tickled my fancy~
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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