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Sunshine
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Listening to every heart

0 posted 2001-08-14 07:46 PM


o
/|\
/\

guardians linger
spirituality soars
fires flame the night

o
/|\
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custodians mind
sentiments of warriors
voices on the wind

o
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wolves ever watchful
spirits guide their steps tonight
elevated cries

o
/|\
/\

caliginous sky
moon bright casting shadows walk
sentinels, silent

o
/|\
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[This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 08-14-2001).]

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Denise
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1 posted 2001-08-14 09:13 PM


Very well done, Karilea! You're really good at these!
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wonderful!!  
Marge Tindal
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3 posted 2001-08-16 03:46 AM


Karilea~
I thought I heard the sound of moccasin's ~
Such lovely, lovely imagery captured in gentle keep~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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4 posted 2001-08-16 09:08 AM


ah.. very nicely penned... I do enjoy this form and you do it quite well..


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5 posted 2001-08-16 09:28 AM


I echo Marge ... very well constructed


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6 posted 2001-08-16 09:30 AM


excellent sunshine..enjoyed..

                  ~Victoria~

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7 posted 2001-08-16 07:35 PM


Whispered cries in flight
rest in the beds of needles
upon today's pines

~*~

Forgotten battles
bleed innocently tonight
within stones of time

~*~

Wonderful senyrus and surely a topic worth much portrayal.  Well done.

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8 posted 2001-08-16 11:34 PM


I had to print them and put in your booklet I keep up, these were outstanding Sunshine.

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   ~* Mysteria *~

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9 posted 2001-08-17 08:53 AM



These were awesome, Karilea  

Take a bow, Queen of haikus/senryus  

Melissa~

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it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

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10 posted 2001-08-17 09:57 AM


very fine! seem historically sound, having a very traditional feel to them


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