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SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

0 posted 2001-08-13 10:25 AM

Feather light
and fancy free
Floating in
the sky of me
dancing on
whim of breeze
drifting through
my memories
landing softly……slight reprieve
(thoughts of you
never leave)

………again to air
with no direction
come face to face
with soul reflection
mirrored in
your fluttering ‘round
heart connection
has been found

through my veins
I feel you soar
To my ocean
To my core
Resting here
In sands of shore
With me now
And forever more………..

~SEA~

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

1 posted 2001-08-13 10:29 AM

Lovely, lovely SEA, absolutely!

the only thing that haldted me, I don't think you need the AND in the last line, maybe a comma at the end of the line before, but I think to the ear and heart only the briefest pause is needed before "forever more"

What do you think?

Constance
Member

since 2001-07-28

Posts 393
Ohio

2 posted 2001-08-13 10:31 AM

"through my veins
I feel you soar
To my ocean
To my core
Resting here
In sands of shore
With me now
And forever more……….."

Very, very lovely, SEA. Sure sounds like love to me!

Decaflame
Senior Member

since 2001-05-11

Posts 1635

3 posted 2001-08-13 10:31 AM

SEA, to see you floating so beautifully on a Monday morning makes me think that you had a most wonderful weekend...

this is lovely...

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

4 posted 2001-08-13 10:43 AM

VAS~ thanks, I debated that and LOL

it does sound better without

Constance~ thank you very much, and yes, it is love

THe hubby is everything

Deca~ oh yes

thank you

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

5 posted 2001-08-13 10:50 AM

dancing on
whim of breeze
drifting through
my memories
landing softly……slight reprieve
(thoughts of you
never leave)

………again to air
with no direction
come face to face
with soul reflection
mirrored in
your fluttering ‘round
heart connection
has been found

through my veins
I feel you soar
To my ocean
To my core
Resting here
In sands of shore
With me now
And forever more………..
===================================

now whos a butterfly

pure poetry in motion Sea...
absolutely perfect...
afterglow put to rhyme.
magic...
outstanding write of heart
it must be wonderful to have this kind of inspire.
jm

I know no one is to blame
In time youll feel strength when you call my name
I know Ill never hold you again
And I know Ill never be the same
VH

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

6 posted 2001-08-13 12:07 PM

Soft indeed... very nicely done SEA... a pleasure to read

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

7 posted 2001-08-13 02:18 PM

SEA~
Oh ... I just LOVE that forevermore stuff !

Nice, gal~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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