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Consciousness Interrupted
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Consciousness Interrupted |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... 
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Consciousness Interrupted Flashes fired, crimson and grey Hasten through painful release Shattered soul, lifeless display Folded memories, lost in crease Awakened trances, mystic spell Salient visions, thoughts erupted Escape on Eden, no rapturous yell Just consciousness, interrupted! Brought to bear for one last test Tiresome journey, endless display Forbidden time, seeking rest Lost embrace, in bright red clay "Let me pierce the realm of glamour |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Beautifully crafted EagleOne ... wonderful phrasing from the title through to the end. Excellent cadence and rhyme ... you've left me with much to ponder in this piece, very well done!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Kit ~ Thank you my friend, I value and appreciate your comments. I feel it is good to give the reader something to ponder, as is the case with life, there is always much to think about! You take care!"Let me pierce the realm of glamour |
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shadow of the fall Member
since 2001-08-13
Posts 83Indiana |
this is a journey into complete emotion, leaving the reader with much to think about. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
EagleOne~ Greatly enjoyed the rhyme scheme~ AND ... 'Folded memories' LOVE that thought~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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maeve Member
since 2001-08-01
Posts 139In the Outback |
Awakened trances, mystic spell Salient visions, thoughts erupted Escape on Eden, no rapturous yell Just consciousness, interrupted! Definitely something to ponder Eagle. Maeve Take me home to Erin's shores, |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Eagle my friend...another true sign of the poet living and breathing within you...giving us something to ponder..the best poetry is the poetry that not only makes us feel...but makes us think. Love and hugs to you sweet poet  |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Beauty in every line my friend...but then I expect no less from you |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Excellent vocabulary and phrasing here Eagle, youve used quite a few unique and clever words and the imagery is vivid and powerful very cool write...cool title too once again I say..well done POET sir  |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Yes, very well written. Agree with all the above. It flows to the imagination and thought. Thank you. Sincerely, Regina |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
I apologise for the group reply but I have to do this from work as I’m having problems with my machine at home.  I truly appreciate all your comments and thank you for taking the time to make them. It’s good to know that you not only liked this but that you found something in it to make you think, that is a good thing I feel, take care all! "Let me pierce the realm of glamour |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Whoa, Eddie, you just said a mouthful! As I reread I see more to make me pause. Dee I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Love the last line my friend, indeed a masterful piece...well written ~HUGS~ Tracie Love is the life of the soul... |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Thank you! Each and every one of you, for you time, your thoughts...thanks. Take care! "Let me pierce the realm of glamour |
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